When Eyes First Locked

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When Eyes First Locked

Post by laperr2922 » 26 Nov 2017, 21:24

When Eyes First Locked

When eyes first locked, I'm speaking of yours and mine.

When our eyes locked was the very first time, I seen those big beautiful eyes of yours.

When our eyes locked, It was doing passing, never knowing if I will lock eyes with those big beautiful eyes of yours again!

Hours past's since I locked eyes with those big beautiful eyes of yours.

After hours, our eyes locked for the second time.

Different time, same place, I locked eyes with those big beautiful eyes of yours again for the second time.

I knew right then and there, that I wanted to lock eyes with those big beautiful eyes of yours forever...

By,
Larry Perry, Sr.
11/05/2017
This poem is dedicated to, Paula W_ _ _ _ _ _ _??!!!

By,
Larry Wyatt Perry Sr.

-- 26 Nov 2017, 21:27 --

This is a true story. I fell in love with my wife eyes before falling in love with her. We were together for over twenty years.

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Post by Bluecobia » 26 Nov 2017, 21:27

Very sweet thoughts. Thanks for the poem.
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Post by laperr2922 » 26 Nov 2017, 22:10

Thanks for reading I appreciate that.

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Post by KatSims92 » 29 Jun 2018, 10:03

Lovely poem and I can really sense the longing there. Nice work.

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