An Ordinary Moon

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An Ordinary Moon

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There is an ordinary moon tonight ...
not a full moon, ripe, ready to wane,
hovering, heavy with its own light ...

A perfect circle in the window pane,
a sentinel to shepherd us through sleep
until it cedes to sunlight once again.

Nor yet eclipsed, and glowing copper-deep
with burnished russet that, in olden time
would have summoned gods, made legends seep

evoking both the fearful and sublime
with radiant red where silver ought to be,
and nor is it a new moon, fragile, fine,

a shining sliver in a starlit sea,
a crescent curve not carved by human hands
flickering, it seems, precariously.

It's not a frost-ringed moon, that ice-girt stands
solidified to winter's warning white,
a messenger from lunar arctic lands.

It is just ordinary, half-ripe, grey,
squat in a grey and ordinary sky,
and waiting for an ordinary day.

And yet the heavens seem to sigh
saluting as it edges by.
An Eye for an Eye only ends up making the whole world blind.

Mahatma Gandhi
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This is so beautiful. I'm truly impressed with how well-crafted this is. You're really gifted and should keep it up!
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Wow! This is beautiful! I love the imagery
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Hey
How wonderful poetry
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I love the first line of the poem.
There is something so simple and yet beautiful here- great work =)
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