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Chigozie Anuli Mbadugha
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Post by Chigozie Anuli Mbadugha »

It was meant to be a routine check-up
Nothing to cause a major shake-up
Yet events elicited a huge outburst
Like a balloon blown so big it burst

I had noticed nothing, you see
It was my first so signs were few
But the shuffling in the scan room
The move to call another spelt doom

What’s wrong? I asked her quickly
She removed her gaze abruptly
After what seemed like an hour
She broke the news so sour

I hate to say this at our first meeting
But I can’t see the fetal hearts beating
I have no answers to your query
But am truly very sorry

I climbed down the couch solemnly
And sat on the bare floor sublimely
All I could do was cry
And stop me no one dared try.

I barely felt the labor pain
An epidural could give no gain
The ache in my heart was intense
The emptiness even worse

In the weeks that passed it hurt badly
But I clung to God to help me solely
I needed a ray in the dark tunnel
And not drown in pain’s funnel

Time finally brought me healing
My faith in God found me soaring
His Peace never left me
His Grace so upheld me!
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Post by Whitney Marchelle »

Great Poem! I enjoyed the rhyming, it started to become a discovery, on what could rhyme in the next line. 2 thumbs up!
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Chigozie Anuli Mbadugha
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Post by Chigozie Anuli Mbadugha »

Thanks for the thumbs up Whitney!! Deeply appreciated! Best wishes!
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Post by Ozzy »

Nice poem, my best part was when you finally clinched to God and he healed you
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Chigozie Anuli Mbadugha
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Post by Chigozie Anuli Mbadugha »

Thanks Ozzy, for letting me know what you liked best about the poem. Deeply appreciated!
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Post by Gabyap »

I enjoyed the rhyming words too, good job.
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Chigozie Anuli Mbadugha
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Post by Chigozie Anuli Mbadugha »

Thanks Gabyap! Welcome to OBC!
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