A Pillar Of Salt For You

[geoffrey ngoima]

A Pillar Of Salt For You

Grey days ahead- the bag is on my back,
Uncertain stares- strange, distant, blank;
Always with you I did not know what to do,
But I won't turn around- a pillar of salt for you.

The reminiscing wind is rewinding
This taped record of lost love, halting
My feet for a while- a minute or two,
Though I won't turn around- a pillar of salt for you.

I am not alone- hear the debris breathe,
Then gasp, grasp, as I cross the bridge.
Only carcasses behind, nothing to go back to,
I cannot turn around- a pillar of salt for you.

*From My Old Poems Collections

[aflynn]

Honestly this is really nice, it brings about an imagery of bittersweet nostalgia for difficult relationships and the hesitant feeling we have when leaving said relationships. I also enjoy the feeling of " I'm sticking to my gut and mind and leaving, there is nothing beneficial left for me to go back to", which is a beautiful foundation of the self confidence we should aspire to when leaving the toxic people in our life. I really enjoyed the lines " I am no alone, here the debris breathe", and " only carcasses behind, nothing left to go back to you". I also like the use of a salt pillar in this, since salt is commonly used to ward off negative influences and energies. Overall lovely job!

[geoffrey ngoima]

Honestly this is really nice, it brings about an imagery of bittersweet nostalgia for difficult relationships and the hesitant feeling we have when leaving said relationships. I also enjoy the feeling of " I'm sticking to my gut and mind and leaving, there is nothing beneficial left for me to go back to", which is a beautiful foundation of the self confidence we should aspire to when leaving the toxic people in our life. I really enjoyed the lines " I am no alone, here the debris breathe", and " only carcasses behind, nothing left to go back to you". I also like the use of a salt pillar in this, since salt is commonly used to ward off negative influences and energies. Overall lovely job!

Thank you, Aflynn!
I didn't even know that about salt I was thinking about Lot's wife when I wrote that, still clinging to the past/things left behind that ended her/turned her into something, bad...
Nway it was a long time ago...

[juliusotinyo]

Poetry...mayne! Told you, you are more skilled in writing. Kenyan high schools nearly killed me with these things. I could only get the first paragraph...OK, maybe just the rhymes!

[geoffrey ngoima]

Poetry...mayne! Told you, you are more skilled in writing. Kenyan high schools nearly killed me with these things. I could only get the first paragraph...OK, maybe just the rhymes!

Haha, waw, such a prestigious school, ..I was mostly average in school..thank you, JO, this was a long long time ago. Maybe in the future when the universe allows/I'll ready everything & continue with my novel/poems

[juliusotinyo]

At least I have my almanacs...

[geoffrey ngoima]

At least I have my almanacs...

Haha, I guess we all have our almanacs, ...