Smell The Beautiful Rose of The Lilies by Nwoko S.I.

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Nwoko Solomon Ikechu
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Smell The Beautiful Rose of The Lilies by Nwoko S.I.

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Smell The Beautiful Rose of The Lilies A Collection of Poems (With Simple Diction) By Nwoko, Solomon Ikechukwu
"Till I Met Him"
Lonely in the valley of rejection
Disdained in the eyes of the royalties
Inferior to the hearts of the seemed superiors
Fed up with friends
Who only worsened the pains for trust

I made them true friends
But to them, I am a means to an achievement
I am honest to them
But they play games on me
I laughed and smiled with them because I care
But smiles and laughter cloth their faces when they need a favour to ask of me

I was hurt till I give up trust
There is nothing like true friend I believed
Fed up with life worth living in love- true love

But I met Him
And I smiled in silence
Till I laughed in open
He is more than a true friend
He smiles with me
Laughs in sincere joy with me
He praises my well doing
And corrects in love my wrong doing
He is hurt with my hurt
Takes pleasure in giving me a helping hands in times of need
His love and care are beyond my merit
He had appease my soul of the millions hurts of the past
He worth more than billions and billions of friends I had and will want to have

He is a true friend!

"In Search of Her"
It flows like a river
Stills like a gentile breeze
Chills like the embrace of a dearly loved one
It is like a sweet dreams
You wish not to wake up from
It appeases the heart with peace
Relaxes the mind with joy
And keeps the body beautiful and the skin shining more than the power of the ointment
True love

It's hard to find
She may not be found
Many have not found her
Millions scrambled for her
Countless hearts wounded for her sake
Billions of minds damaged in search of her
Millions of souls interned cos they are rubbed of her

Yet she is a precious gift of costliest price
She smells batter than the beautiful rose
Gladdens the heart than diamond
She gives peaceful and fruitful life
And live longer than age
People admires her
And appreciates those who have her
True love

She is a beautiful rose for the nose to smell
A beautiful laughter and smiles on the lonely face
A radiating light to the darkened heart of hate
She makes a man to appreciate life and wish to die no more
True love

She is from one source
With one spirit
Of one aim-peace and love
Has only one giver
Find Him
You'll have her
True love.
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Post by Kuznec »

Very symbolic, and very beautifully written. You have a great future and an obvious talent.
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That is very kind and encouraging of you, thank you so much, Kuznec.
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Post by Czarmaine AM »

Wow. What an amazing piece. I liked that you have made this with his and her point of view. Thanks for sharing this, I truly enjoyed reading. <3
"Though my soul may set in darkness, it will rise in perfect light;
I have loved the stars too fondly to be fearful of the night."
(The Old Astronomer to His Pupil by Sarah Williams)
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Thanks a lot for enjoying the poems.
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Post by ANDREW MBAGO »

Thank you for sharing the beautiful poem with us.I suggest you look at the structure to give the poem a beautiful image.The lines in the stanzas should also be same.It is very symbolic with conjuring images.Yours senses seem stretched and that makes you poetic.

Keep on writing for the more you write,the better you become.
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Post by Nwoko Solomon Ikechu »

Thanks so much. But the poems are prosaic (free verse) not sonnet, hence same line and stanza does not count here. In prosaic you freely pass your message in poetic manner. Thanks again for your suggestions.
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Post by ANDREW MBAGO »

Thank you Nwoko Solomon for having introduced me to prosaic poetry.This is a literary forum where brain sharpens brain.

Keep writing!
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I love how your creative with your words
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Post by Nwoko Solomon Ikechu »

Thank you so much Shadene

-- 26 Aug 2017, 21:30 --
ANDREW MBAGO wrote:Thank you Nwoko Solomon for having introduced me to prosaic poetry.This is a literary forum where brain sharpens brain.

Keep writing!
My pleasure, and you are most welcome.
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