Freestyle verse #1

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Freestyle verse #1

Post by Jaime Lync » 11 Jun 2017, 16:22

What is there to gain
for sticking out against the grain?
You think it's fun to be called insane?
Not in it for the fame,
this is not a game
I ain't trying to entertain
no, no, don't care if you never know my name
just trying to stay in my lane
Yh, I want to assist those in pain
but sorry, I'm no Superman, so Lois Lane
if you are counting on me, you will be Lois slain.
I'm not the source of the strength in my membrane
this poet is just a stroke of the pen of the one who inspires my brain

I hope you understand what I'm saying

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Post by fidelarmus » 14 Jun 2017, 21:37

Jaime Lync wrote:What is there to gain
for sticking out against the grain?
You think it's fun to be called insane?
Not in it for the fame,
this is not a game
I ain't trying to entertain
no, no, don't care if you never know my name
just trying to stay in my lane
Yh, I want to assist those in pain
but sorry, I'm no Superman, so Lois Lane
if you are counting on me, you will be Lois slain.
I'm not the source of the strength in my membrane
this poet is just a stroke of the pen of the one who inspires my brain

I hope you understand what I'm saying
Like the apocalyptic undertones but it also comes across as a rebellious aspiration. God may have thy hand upon [you]; that you'd not suffer brunt of the enemy attack. Bible could help stir expository inspiration and feed mind amid one's faith level. God's grace never leaves stones left lone to it's own.

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Post by Jaime Lync » 14 Jun 2017, 22:38

Thanks so much Fidelarmus. You have really motivated me to focus more on Bible study and my relationship with God.

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Post by John Cand » 16 Jun 2017, 18:37

Nice poem. I understand what you saying

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Post by Galvin pulk » 19 Jun 2017, 08:52

what can realy go on with long time travel

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