I never
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I never
i wanted to tear peoples hearts
in beautiful ways,
make impact,
change the structure of people’s brain tendrils,
i wanted to create laughter, pain, feeling in my words
i needed people to be destroyed, in one way or another
by my voice,
my writing,
my echo,
for I believe feeling is the only way to get through;
for people to understand that -
i am not here lightly
i am a gallant ball of flames
i spew passion from every angle
my fire is not to be distinguished
i’ll roar my way through your forest,
tear it down,
leave the ashes on the ground
as a reminder
that i,
never wanted to drift through life
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Thank you so much for your kind words! It means a lot to me that you liked it. I'm glad this poem inspired you and that you can take something from it. It honestly means the world to meKelebogile Mbangi wrote:Inspiring! I personally love writing poetry and short stories, your poem makes me want to be more passionate about writing. And its so easy to drift through the motions of life, thanks for sharing this piece!
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I have loved the stars too fondly to be fearful of the night."
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Thank you so much for your super kind comment It means a lot to me! You could definitely write something like this! <3czarmaineam wrote:I'm amazed by how you used the same lines in the beginning and end of this poem. I've always wanted to write something like this but I can't seem to find the right words. Good job! thanks for sharing your passion to the world <3
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I never wanted to drift through life
I came and I saw
And all I wanted to do was conquer
I never wanted to drift through life.
Thanks for sharing this piece.
PS. I think you might have erred by using distinguished rather than extinguished in line sixteen.