Just a lonely chair.

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Just a lonely chair.

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Just a lonely chair in an empty room
as shadows paint the walls,
just a broken heart
in a lonely chair
defeated by it all.
Your missing laughter fills my ears
as tears fill my eyes
and your perfume lingers longingly,
a reminder of a lost prize.
Your footsteps echo ghostly
upon the dusty floor,
leaving a trail of heartbreak
amidst emotions bleeding and raw.
I loved you in all truth
and laid my life at your feet,
my soul was yours forever,
my heart, was yours to keep.
But as I bathed in your radiance
you wallowed in shadows dark,
and as I cherished your very presence
you were beginning to break my heart.
You owe me the truth,
if not your heart,
what did you find in shadows,
that finally tore us apart?

You left without warning
you cleared the cupboards bare,
and all you left for me
was this lonely, lonely chair.
Shadows paint the walls
whilst heartache fills the air,
and I'll just remain here,
in this lonely, lonely chair.



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Post by Zzaakkiiyyaa »

I typically tend to struggle writing poetry that rhymes. Therefore, I love reading poetry that has a great rhyme - and this did! Excellent, I love the emotion behind your words.
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The flow of this poem is awesome. Love your poem Snowghost.
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This poem reminded me of the first time I got my heart broken. Thanks for sharing this.
"Though my soul may set in darkness, it will rise in perfect light;
I have loved the stars too fondly to be fearful of the night."
(The Old Astronomer to His Pupil by Sarah Williams)
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Zzaaakkiiyyaa.

Many thanks for your kind comment and for taking the time to read my poem, I'm glad you enjoyed it.



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-- 06 Jun 2017, 13:46 --

czarmaineam

I hope it wasn't too upsetting, thanks for taking the time to read.


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-- 06 Jun 2017, 13:49 --

Jaime Lync.

Thank you for your kind comment, and for taking the time to read my work, I hope you enjoyed it.


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