"It's complicated"

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He doesn’t know she’s writing things about him
Neither does he care about the alicia keys she sings for him
He is crass and insensitive
She is pure and subtle
It’s an impossible love story, a peculiar one but with the usual kind of irony


Yet, they bought a one way ticket to the moon
Without looking back, they dodge meteors and asteroids, hand in hand
He is brave and courageous
She is tender and supportive
It’s an almost perfect love story, the kind that will make you believe in eternity


One day, in their make-believe reality,
They heard a familiar sound of thunder calling them to come back home
He wanted to fly back
She wondered why
Like in any other love stories, the two of them started to question everything


She doesn’t know he loved the waters
Neither the admiration he had for birds, fishes and trees
He lost himself in her
She thought she found herself in him
Like fairy tale endings, they lived happily ever after but away from each other


He went to the deepest of oceans, she explored the infinity of galaxy
Two people who once thought they are one are now gone
But who knows?
Maybe in his search of the perfect sea, he’ll remember her deep blue eyes
or perhaps she’ll find a silver star and remember the softness of his hair
Maybe in unexplainable and unimaginable way, they’ll still find a way back to each other
"Though my soul may set in darkness, it will rise in perfect light;
I have loved the stars too fondly to be fearful of the night."
(The Old Astronomer to His Pupil by Sarah Williams)
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I really like this. I like how you've set the stanzas out and how it tells a clear story all the way through.
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It's complicated but the story in this poem is simply awesome.
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Zzaakkiiyyaa wrote:I really like this. I like how you've set the stanzas out and how it tells a clear story all the way through.
Thank you for your kind words! Honestly, I did not intend to set the stanzas that way. I was just writing random words and was also surprised with the output. :lol:

-- 05 Jun 2017, 22:17 --
Jaime Lync wrote:It's complicated but the story in this poem is simply awesome.
I got the title from the list of relationship status in Facebook :lol: I really appreciate your kind words! Cheers!
"Though my soul may set in darkness, it will rise in perfect light;
I have loved the stars too fondly to be fearful of the night."
(The Old Astronomer to His Pupil by Sarah Williams)
Latest Review: "Border Post 99" by Kedar Patankar
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