Grammar school

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Jaime Lync
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Grammar school

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wish I went
because after I've spent
so many time writing a piece
the reviewer tells me that I misused
an apostrophe. Forgot a comma and a letter

I'm a green writer - I can do better.
Roll on and maturity is what I need

''If you live for their acceptance,
you'll die from their rejection.''

Lecrae said that in a rap song
guys got a couple of Grammys but
I think his music is hardly known because...
that's all off-topic...this is about me, myself and I

and how I get a little upset
when my work seems to be rejected
but that's a weak mindset. The reviewer is
giving me constructive criticism. I'm the one who
is breaking down myself. Have to remember why I do this

First and foremost, I write to glorify the name, Jesus Christ
I'm an advocate for the faith walk I struggle to live out but
say that I am willing to die for. I picked up the pen to express
my mind. Lord renew my mind and give me the grace to grow
as a writer who shares truth and life; a writer that knows when to...
go to grammar school.
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Post by Czarmaine AM »

I could totally relate to this poem! It's good to know that I am not alone. :lol: Cheers!
"Though my soul may set in darkness, it will rise in perfect light;
I have loved the stars too fondly to be fearful of the night."
(The Old Astronomer to His Pupil by Sarah Williams)
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Post by Kelebogile Mbangi »

Sounds a lot like the first chapter from "Raquel Says (Something Entirely Unexpected)" by Mois Benarroch. Your poem conveys these thoughts well! Love it!
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Post by Zzaakkiiyyaa »

I absolutely adored the structure of this poem. You have fantastic skill! Thank you for sharing.
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Thanks for reading and commenting everyone. Glad you all liked it.
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