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How could i

Post by Amcdanel86 » 30 Oct 2016, 00:32

I didn't know I could love again
how could I he hurt me so
I didn't know I could trust again
how could I he lied to me
I didn't know I could feel safe again
how could I he hurt me so

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Post by Ljessup » 03 Nov 2016, 09:51

This poem causes many different thoughts for me. I have to applaud you because I keep re-reading it trying to figure out why one would feel this way, to this degree of repetitiveness, with little to go off of other than the fact that there is a negative vibe flowing from the words. I say that to show it is captivating in its own way because as human beings the natural curiosity is what keeps us reading on, but I feel incomplete and unable to connect with the work itself because what I could latch onto so as to understand the pain being portrayed is absent. All in all I still enjoy it immensely because of the conflicting emotions it causes me. That is the way I hope to feel at the end of a poem so job well done in my opinion.

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Post by versetab » 02 Dec 2016, 17:15

A bit of typo, but i certainly liked it. Short and nice...

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Post by Insightsintobooks » 09 Jan 2017, 00:08

I liked this. Even though it's short it brings up questions of trust and love.

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