Reflection of life

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Reflection of life

Post by Ammu24 » 29 Sep 2015, 05:54

I went up the narrow winding stairs

and came out in the desolated field.

The plants that sprung up the minute

my foot touched the ground .

The whole field, what is this?

I thought to myself with amazement still lingering .

Ah! I realized in a minutes, the field,

As the mind of a human being .

And the plants on the field I recognized

as the feeling of mind the sweet flowers,

Which covered on side, went the thought of happiness .

In the trees I recognized the kindness

which benefits others. Ah? On the

other side what I saw made me sad .

Oh! I saw the land covered with rocks

it gave the ilk appearance of a barren land.

The barren land was indeed the sorrow,

The nettles, which was seen in abundance,

reminded me of the cruelty, jealousy and

other evil intention of the mind .

The middle of the field was a beautiful lake .

covered with weeds and marshy was the

appearance in one side of the lake.

The lake on the other side was

indeed a picture to the seen.

To the lake I walked unthinkingly .

I looked in to the marshy side,

it was the sin committed by the person.

Oh! its my mind i realized.

I was shattered beyond words .

for my sins appears to be numerous.

Relief beyond words were poured the

minute I saw the surface of

the beautiful lake on the other side .

I understood that this was the lake

‘Reflection of Life’ which analyses us.

I prayed to God to wash away my sins.

Lo! Miracle of miracles a light spread

From the middle of Lake it spread

Like air I felt happiness surroundings.

Oh! I was woken by the beam of sunlight

Was I dreaming for I was in my bed

I understand that this was the test of Lord.

P.s: I wrote this 10 years back in my schooldays.I have not yet written anything this lengthy again. I am wondering whether to start writing again or not. Also English is my second language.

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Post by Akosua + » 29 May 2018, 12:24

U must continue writing dear. This is such an inspiring poem. U can focus mainly on Christians if u want. I liked it very much

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Post by sarkash » 29 May 2018, 12:32

Yeaaaahhhhh it is hearttouching...deeply sensed poetry

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Post by Ammu24 » 08 Jun 2018, 05:40

Thank you 😀

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Post by KatSims92 » 28 Jun 2018, 11:10

This was so lovely, and I agree that it could be inspirational to lots of spiritually-minded people. I love the imagery and how each image has a deeper meaning. Great work!

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Post by Ammu24 » 30 Jun 2018, 14:16

Thank you for your encouragement 😀

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Post by palilogy » 02 Jul 2018, 11:23

I think you should keep writing.
You are very good with images and bringing that vivid feeling to the reader =)

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