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thisgirl818
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I tried to bounce back after you
I learned it the hard way
because I thought this was it
I thought you were the one
I guess it's a heartbreak that I won't forget

I thought I already wrote the goodbye story
of the girl who who scandalously cried her heart out
at an old bus top on a rainy night
the silence was deafening
as I went pretending all these years

Three steps was all it took
my heart died on the pedestal
not knowing how many mini start overs
will it take to get over something that started so perfect
and yet ended so tragically
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Post by Victor Obiora 7 »

Good depiction of a broken heart.
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Post by Brett Linette »

There's a lot of story in this poem. I felt like I was watching a movie.

Nice work!
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