Show me your naked pain

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Nnaji Joy
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I love it. It's a poem of few words with lots of meaning
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You're really an experienced creator. I like your poem and rate it at 4/4 star.
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Post by Absalom Augustine »

:D very nice poem
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Show me your naked pain
Show me your naked pain where the heart is wounded and full of shame and your life will never be the same.
Show me your naked pain where it hurts so much and no body or finger can touch don't want to be rude but show me your nude pain. naked pain.
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Waw, this is raw. I am pleasantly surprised. Little yet so much. Great 🙏🏼👏🏽
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Post by Jana Stanhope »

:tiphat: :tiphat: :tiphat: :tiphat:
Good JOB!!!
May I Share with you My Naked Pain!!

Called:
Fear .... Why
Fear Not... How?
I woke up sweating from a nightmare.
With fear in my heart, in result of death.
I remember hiding and running from a loved one. Scared for my life... Waking up in panic.
And fear.
I fear the process of GREIVING may have came to an end.
I feared Everytime I cried alone on the cold floor.
I feared Everytime the movie plot, setting, and the main character didn't come to an end, still rolling.
I feared for the life of my parents, as a result, untreated
I feared Everytime slipping into old ways.

I feared Everytime I would say sorry for the words and actions of, to validate myself.
I feared waking up everyday, rerun, to the point I knew how the day was going to be, what was gonna be said and reactions, just by the look in the eye.
I feared Everytime a ding came on the phone.
I feared the distance between.
I feared the lack of communication, as a result I was ignored... But I talk to much?
I feared how I was the victim, but He took the role.
I feared being alone.
*****
I used to fear not being your angel, but can't raise MAN, only hold a hand and guide.
I used to fear us seeing others, in the movie, I was Always crossing a boundary..
I used to fear being untreated and as a result...
I feel healed....but far from it...
I used to fear the doubt & opinions of..., now irrelevant.
I used to fear not being validated and encouragement from Him
I used to fear Him moving on, happened along time, again, when I heard Him say he regretted choosing me.
I used to fear the regret of saying I Do, but I don't!
I used to fear waking up everyday.
I used to fear talking and opening up, cuz obviously was not heard and still told I'm wrong.

I used feared every night I couldn't tock my babies in, ohh so tight
I blamed me and took accountability, always stuck up for Him, but in reality. According to the documents
I used to always feared to say, He is partially to blame as of 12/15/2018.
I used to fear being the villain, but whatever makes you sleep better at night.

I used to fear sleeping alone, but I've been alone since u got west central.

I used to fear the lack of communication with family, but they have a life as well.
I used to fear plot and motive of the movie.
I used to fear not being ABLE to sway Him to full potential.
I used to fear the lies that laid out to others.

But who is to Judge, if not God, you can't play that role.
For fear, fear only a learned behavior.
Fear alone can kill a soul and ambitions.
Fear should only be used as information.
Fear can Also drive us to regret.
The only fear that is acceptable is, the fear of falling and loud noises. (12/24/2021)
I learned to Fear Not.

Fear Not, the nightmares, it's a sign.
Fear Not waking up, it's a blessing.

Fear Not being lonely, FOR I BEEN HERE THE WHOLE TIME.
FEAR NOT YOUR FAMILY, THEY ARE PROTECTED.
FEAR NOT THE PAST, STEPPING BACK WILL HOLD YOU FROM THE FUTURE.
FEAR NOT VALIDATION, VALIDATE YOURSELF IN THE MIRROR.
BUT WITH A SMILE, AFFIRMATIONZ
FEAR NOT FOUNDATION OR MASCARA
FEAR NOT THE DOUBT IN YOUR HEAD!
FEAR NOT BEING HEARD.
FEAR NOT PAST REGRET.
FEAR NOT AS A RERUN THAT KEEPS PLAYING IN HIS HEAD.
FEAR NOT YOU'RE NOT A VILLAIN OR A VICTIM.
FEAR NOT REGRETS
FEAR NOT CHOICES, THAT ARE NOT YOUR OWN
FEAR NOT, MY CHILD, FEAR NOT THE MISTAKES IF HAVE you OWNd
AND FEAR NOT THE CONSEQUENCES FOR YOU SHOULD HAVE THOUGHT OF THEM BEFORE YOU MADE A DECISION!

Fear Not GREIVING BCUZ THAT HAS CAME TO AN END.

YOU CAN PRESS REWIND MANY TIMES TO REPLAY
FEAR NOT ... YOU CAN'T TAKE BACK THE DAMAGE THAT'S ALREADY DONE.
THE CURTAIN IS CLOSING
NO ROSES AT MY FEET
ONLY THIS BAG OF ROTTEN TOMATOES
I have forgaven
What a defeat!

Dear Fear

No, no...

I used to fear....

Ha,

Today I woke up with you but
I
Will
Fear Not!
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Post by Nattynatty »

So Deep and also encouraging I would love to sit alone and read this.

Powerful word, fear not.
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Post by nidhi_27 »

Beautiful poem, Scott. It hit deep and I was overwhelmed with the surging emotions after reading this.
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Post by Nila_Rose_Alaban22 »

Show me your naked pain,
Together,let's face and solve it then.
No need to be frightened,
For in my shoulder you can always lean.

No need to hide the pain inside,
For I am always here by your side.
Worries should be set aside,
And in your face the smile should be wide.

Cruel world must be face,
But life is not a race.
Faith,Courage and Determination,
And always have an inspiration,

So naked pain will be put in vain,
Beacuse you deserve a toast of champagne!
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Post by Catherine Burnett »

Such a yearning....
Where is the notebook of my poems from my childhood? If only I still had it because I know there is a poem in there relating to yours, Scott. I was about ten years old at the time.......so long ago now.
Poetry was my outlet in a world of supressed expression. It's nice that others still love poetry.
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Post by Juliannapari »

This is beautiful
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Post by Tumelo Tefo »

Thank you for inviting us to share our true selves. This is what art is truly about :)
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Post by Hasa Athapaththu »

I can just feel it in my bones. A really beautiful piece of art.
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Post by Moriah Elyce »

Wow this seems genuine and out of the nude soul inspiring and truthful in one word... amazing
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Post by rozina hirani »

SHOW ME YOUR NAKED PAIN

NAKED PAIN OHHH YEEEEE
OHHHH YEEEE
NOT EASY, NOT EASY
TO SHOW NAKED PAIN
LIFE TEACHES US MANY MANY THINGS
SOMETIMES WE GET CONFUSED ABOUT LIVING THIS LIFE

SHOW ME WHAT IS LIFE
SHOW ME WHAT TO DO
SHOW ME HOW TO LIVE
WITHOUT YOU

NOT EASY, NOT EASY
TO SHOW NAKED PAIN
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