Show me your naked pain

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Show me your naked pain

Post by Scott »

I wrote this today.


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Show me your naked pain
Show me your soul in the nude
Show me the reality
Of what it means to be you

Strip away the polite lies
Strip away the protective mask
Strip away the stiff upper lip
Bare it on the tip of the past

Be here in our now
Be untethered, free
Be you
With me


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Beautiful
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:tiphat: Wow Scott! You really are a great poet!!
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A great and meaningful poem!

Your handwriting is beautiful!
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It makes you feel like when you are first in love!
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I love the rhythm in it
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Beautiful ♡♡
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I don't understand why all this sadness
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Soo deep...
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Short and precise with deep meanings. Nice poem.
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Another great piece! Keep it up and thanks for sharing! :-)
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I am impressed about this poem, really it is amazing I can rate it 4/4. I like so much the way you are creating poem. In brief, I am influenced about your work, I have to be inspired about you to become a greater author and publish books as you because in me, I have the talents and I am passionated about reading books OnlineBookClub website.
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I absolutely love this. Very inspiring for me.
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Simple and straightforward but it makes you think.. great creativity
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If everyone could embrace the message of this poem, the world will be a better place. We all need to drop the charade of smiles and come out clean to ourselves. It will be a lot easier to relate with one another.

Thank you for this poem, Scott. Really beautiful.
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