Show me your naked pain

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Show me your naked pain

Post by Scott »

I wrote this today.


Show me your naked pain
Show me your soul in the nude
Show me the reality
Of what it means to be you

Strip away the polite lies
Strip away the protective mask
Strip away the stiff upper lip
Bare it on the tip of the past

Be here in our now
Be untethered, free
Be you
With me

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Post by John Arun Kumar »

:tiphat: Wow Scott! You really are a great poet!!
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Post by gali »

A great and meaningful poem!

Your handwriting is beautiful!

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Post by Ingrid Sanchez »

It makes you feel like when you are first in love!
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Post by Twesigye A »

I love the rhythm in it
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Post by Lucia Maredi »

Beautiful ♡♡
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Post by eman1013 »

I don't understand why all this sadness
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Post by malvikaa32 »

Soo deep...
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Post by Avi Shi »

Short and precise with deep meanings. Nice poem.
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Post by tarafarah7 »

Another great piece! Keep it up and thanks for sharing! :-)
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Post by Balebi Alexis »

I am impressed about this poem, really it is amazing I can rate it 4/4. I like so much the way you are creating poem. In brief, I am influenced about your work, I have to be inspired about you to become a greater author and publish books as you because in me, I have the talents and I am passionated about reading books OnlineBookClub website.
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Post by Ashley Knight »

I absolutely love this. Very inspiring for me.
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Post by Richard Phiri 3 »

Simple and straightforward but it makes you think.. great creativity
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Post by Ihuoma03 »

If everyone could embrace the message of this poem, the world will be a better place. We all need to drop the charade of smiles and come out clean to ourselves. It will be a lot easier to relate with one another.

Thank you for this poem, Scott. Really beautiful.
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