My girl

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Guneet kaur Baweja
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My girl

Post by Guneet kaur Baweja »

I held her close my eyes,
I was in pain as i saw her pass by.
I wanted to hold close,
But choose to keep out my nose.
A little moments later,
Body-ached, what was the real matter.
A girl just became mother,
Who’s body wanted to nurture.
Held her for the first time,
She was all mine.
So petite and as soft as cotton,
The moments were captured in the heart’s bottom.
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Post by Theana De lima Araujo »

This is such a lovely poem. I like that the writing is abstract and makes you think about the subject matter. 'So petite and soft as cotton' I love this comparison. Thank you for sharing. Have a lovely evening.
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Post by Lawrencechuks70 »

Oh very sweet and powerful poem ,talking about a girl who became a mother ,and holding the baby for the first time feel so wonderful and as one of the best moments in life
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Post by Lawani Sodick »

Wooow so lovely and meaningful love it
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Post by Syanda Nzimande »

It a great short poem,thank you for your kindness thoughts
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