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Neha++
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Post by Neha++ »

Ever anyone thought,
what it could like be
having different different versions,
for human like we.

One can be evil, one can be angel,
some would like to put other in danger.
One can be weak, one can be strong,
some would like to prove you wrong.

Giving helping hands are the kind one,
they spread light, like rising sun.
One who exploit are the mean,
in the movies you have always seen.

After being successful ,people are proud of you
those who are not, jealousy breaks them apart.
Having brave heart ,is what you need,
being a coward will make you bleed.

Polite or rude, choice is up to you,
making right choice will make you human true.
Spread your warmth, that's all humans need,
being a hostile is just a greed.

Different versions of humans,
makes them apart,
only thing that brings together ,
is love from heart.



-NEHA VISHE
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Hugo Marek
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Post by Hugo Marek »

I recognize your sentiment regarding different personalities and approaches to life, but the grammar was very distracting.
Neha++
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okay...will try to improve next time...thanks
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