Love making

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Jaime Lync
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Love making

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Wedding bells chime, the ceremony is over
Rice rises as we make haste down the aisle
been waiting for this day more than a little while
the day that I am able to fully embrace my lover

bad company asked me what's the point in waiting?
while they were having sex, our love was in the making
an intercourse of the mind and soul as we Christian mingled
minus the worldwide web but we still connected at hot spots
on date nights that ended when the sun came up in all its glory.

Sure, people 'bang dey mouth can't done' as we say
but we knew ourselves and the God to whom we pray
He is our witness, and we are his faithful followers
that's why I vowed to cherish and protect you, my flower

Wedding bells chime, the ceremony is over,
but the road stretches before us beautifully undulating
and as we traverse the ups, downs, and turns of this path
we will delight in the pleasure of erotic romance but remember
that it is only a small portion of the love that we are constantly making
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Post by Tintinni »

Really nice. Well done
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Post by Jaime Lync »

Thanks Tintinni. I was motivated to write this poem by Enya's song 'Only Time".
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Post by helenejike »

Nice theme. Really encouraging in our present time.
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Post by Sohinee Dey »

Loved the way you have penned this ❤
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Post by ANDREW MBAGO »

Well written poem.I love the message of love portrayed in the poem.As i read the poem i feel......charged.
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Post by Czarmaine AM »

My old soul is beaming with joy while reading your poem, Jaime. I loved the last line where you said that erotic romance is just a small portion of love that two people constantly make. This is a very great reminder to people who gets confused with love and lust. Thank you for sharing this poem.
"Though my soul may set in darkness, it will rise in perfect light;
I have loved the stars too fondly to be fearful of the night."
(The Old Astronomer to His Pupil by Sarah Williams)
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Post by ay4sure »

Nice 1, chastisity before marraige is good
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Post by Anneth Reuben »

Nice one! I love poems,and this is one among them!!
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