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Use this forum to post poetry that you have written. This is for getting comments and constructive feedback. This is for original, creative works. You must post the actual text, no links. Only one poem per topic please.
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Jessica Harrison 1
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Post by Jessica Harrison 1 »

The world would wait for a sun
it knows will never rise.
Hope must be infallible,
or we are empty-handed.

Light is something from a daydream
that has been left behind,
and then rinsed away
with the chalk on the driveway.

Our voices are not our own.
They dance and fly away,
billions of fragments and colors.
They become us.

The sun is not as far away
as the earth fears.
It is closer to us
than we are to ourselves.
John Owen
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Post by John Owen »

Nice poem,,, I love the last stansa
"the sun is not far away from us
As the sun fears
It is closer to us
Than we are to ourselves"
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