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Ashley Louise
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Even with unseeing eyes,
and unthinking brain,
ears that have heard too many lies,
and lips that have nearly drown in rain,
I still see your eyes, deep as the oceans endless waves.
Your mind like a maze,
and your heart that still saves.
Saves me from the dark suffocating haze.
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This is beautiful!! There's a real imagery that comes with reading this. Very well written!
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I agree, very well written and heartfelt
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racelaine wrote: ↑14 Sep 2019, 15:27 This is beautiful!! There's a real imagery that comes with reading this. Very well written!
Thank you so much! That means the world to me! I'm so glad you enjoyed it and thank you for taking the time to read it!
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Becs76 wrote: ↑16 Sep 2019, 19:56 I agree, very well written and heartfelt
Thank you so very much! :D
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I hope I can find someone pure in heart in my life that will help me break through the haze of cynicism, as you've described in this lovely piece.
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One feels like a duck, splashing around in all this wet. And when one feels like a duck, one is happy!
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This is very romantic.
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Who's it about?
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