Use this forum to post poetry that you have written. This is for getting comments and constructive feedback. This is for original, creative works. You must post the actual text, no links. Only one poem per topic please.
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Post by Asahley27 » 11 Sep 2018, 12:55

remember the day that I let you in,
Remember how quick I became your friend, giving my all and you was quick to take, breaking me down day by day.
You had me fooled living for you giving up on me and all my dreams
You ran my life pulled all my strings
Telling me lies that I believed, made me feel good talked so sweet whispered sweet nothing's that made me weak.i played along danced to your beat snapping my fingers and tapping my feet bobbing my head and trying to sing
Losing myself but I couldn't see how I was becoming what you wanted to see, losing all the sh*t that made me,

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Post by Floxxy01 » 11 Sep 2018, 19:58

Wow! A nice Piece from a honest write. The mood matters a great deal. This is a call to order. I love it

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Post by Emi_Review » 12 Sep 2018, 04:53

I've seen poems with this topic before but I really enjoyed this, I liked the rhythm and message of this one. The ending especially had an impact. Hope to see more from you :)

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