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what do you think guys?

Post by Izzie Carter » 03 Jun 2018, 10:11

...his fingers scribble a host of words with his pen, a host of words he finds gibberish and quickly erases with a zappy zig zag movement of his pen perhaps following the rhythm of his unstable mind puzzled by fleeting images of disconnected realities. He pens down another set ..and then another..and then another..all meeting the same fate as the first,in a burst of anger he throws the pen aimlessly and rips the paper like a lion feasting on a fresh kill after days of hunger; they were all there. ..in his head.. like jewelry in a jewelry box and he couldn't stand being unable to sort them. He stood up and paced around in utter silence and frustration for a couple of minutes..and then it hit him; the world isn't always black or white, and if you can't draw the picture...draw the frame. So he sat and tore out a fresh sheet.. ..he didn't have a hard time writing about having a hard time writing.
"The world is full of inspiration, sometimes we find it,other times we just have to make it"

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Post by Kippie1244 » 03 Jun 2018, 11:24

Nice creativity. I like the connections with the actual world.

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Post by WaweruNick » 04 Jun 2018, 07:48

:idea2:
Really nice, creative in terms of creative. Ideas come from anything that inspires, even if that inspiration is hard to come by.
Good job.

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Post by Izzie Carter » 04 Jun 2018, 18:08

Thank you guys, really

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Post by SereneCharles » 08 Jun 2018, 16:59

I can totally relate with this. And when the inspiration isn't forthcoming, pick up your pen and 'write about having a hard time writing.' I do that sometimes too.
Writing is so much fun. So is reading. :techie-studyingbrown:

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Post by Carris72 » 11 Jun 2018, 00:34

Very creative piece. Inspiring too.

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Post by Izzie Carter » 15 Jun 2018, 08:46

Wow.. so happy for the feedback.

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Post by Izzie Carter » 15 Jun 2018, 11:50

Wow, glad for the feedback guys.
Reality is the illusion we choose . :techie-studyingbrown:

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