Emotional advantage

[vashistsarita16]

Hello everyone.... This is the true story of a little girl named shubhangi who had ambitions high upto sky. She born in a middle class family and her dreams kept changing with her grown up age During childhood she wanted to be a heroine ..... Then her dream lost with her childhood... She became a young girl and now she wanted to join navy but that couldn't materialise. She started dreaming of a prince charming in navy who will hold her hand and take her in world of stars. But aaaw!!!! this time turned to be very cruel to her. She met a bad boy named dheeraj during college and her life got totally changed. He used to follow her daily . one day he succeed in convincing her to be his girlfriend. She started loving him blindly with full devotion. Then she came to know that he only proposed her just to prove himself amongst his friends . she was shocked and stopped talking to him. But with the passage of time she again got connected with him. Time passed happily. He never promised her to marry her. Still she kept loving him. He started using her emotionally. He told her story of his family that was false totally. He explained his own wife as widow of his elder brother and his own daughters as his brother's. He started harrassing her physically too.He kept telling her that his family is forcing him to get married with that widow. With the time she came to know about the truth and decided to leave him. But he acted as he got fainted. She again pitied him and couldn't leave him this way. Somehow his wife(explained as widow) came to know about all this and shubhangi left dheeraj. But story doesn't end with this he kept calling her and crying that he love her more than himself...

To be continued.........

.

[SereneCharles]

Good story. Weird love though. Looking forward to read the next episode.

[kmkline120]

I think you have a good plot line mapped out for this story. It will definitely be one that many people can relate to and will take the reader on an emotional roller coaster. I would suggest expanding the ideas though and going into more detail about exactly what happened at each point. There are also grammar and punctuation issues, but those can be fixed with a little editing. Keep going with it!