Little vampires
- Nwa
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Little vampires
White and tiny they are, stuck to their hatchpoint, waiting... Gradually growing, hiding in plain sight till that moment we live again.
We are young, we are here, we are breathtakingly beautiful. Translucent in the sun and golden in the shade. It is also a sign, we are not full.
Hmmm, what's that smell? My, what's that sound? Is it a river? Is it thunder or is it both? This is not as loud. No! Whatever it is, our mouth salivates. Our senses are succumbing, ever drawing us nearer to that flow.
The journey is long but we are strong. We won't back down till we are done.
Ahhhh, with a sigh. We are gloriously high. It's salty, it's warm and it has a funny taste... iron? But it's just the meal that we want, none other. It's satisfying.
Now we are red, now we are stronger. Smart enough now, we are faster. For just as long as we are fed so beware, we might come back for another.
Oh no! Now you know. We tried to be discreet but still you felt our weight and our sting. Try and catch us, you can't. We are fast and smart to go places where you can't reach. And when you do catch us, we stain you and fill your nostrils with a sour sweet smell. We make you burn your things and yet we remain. It's such a shame.
Your stories are myths. You have fangs, you have extraordinary speed and strength and what was it again...sires? *LOL*
They are supposed to be immortal yet they are not here. You call us bugs yet your sprays don't work. No matter what you do, we live on. We insist... We are the little vampires.
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An enjoyable read! Thanks for sharing!
― Steven Wright
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This is the only part that confused me a little. The first "you," or "your" rather, refers to humans, but you continue to say "you." Then in the next paragraph, you refer to the mythical vampires as "they."
- Nwa
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'You' or 'your' refers to people and 'they' which I later used refers to the mythical vampires in the stories.
That's what I meant at the time anyway.