YOUNG BOY WHO USED TO INSULT PASTOR

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YOUNG BOY WHO USED TO INSULT PASTOR

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Longtime ago, there used to be this boy, who would hang in the street.Every day Pastor would pass this boy hanging on the same spot and Pastor would be followed by an earth word from the young boy,but Pastor on his bicycle would ignore and pass.Eventhough he was ignored, he never gave up, he would call loud like " Pastor! Pastor!" when Pastor looks at him, he would be like "you mother f****k" . So, one day Pastor went to the boys parents to report, then the boy decided to change. This time the Pastor was passing and the boy became like "Pastor! Pastor!" when the Pastor looks at him, he made an expressional language of an insult, so the Pastor went to report, but could not spill out the insult word said by the boy,therefore the parents felt their boy was being wronged this time, maybe the boy was dancing or something.
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Post by Ckincaid0820 »

I'm not sure what is going on in this story. Some of the words don't make sense in the sentence. Such as "the boy became like".
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Post by bryle28 »

Instead of using the phrase "being wronged" just "not right", a simplier and more comprehensive.
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Post by Sammyjaypee »

You tried
By try to improve tour sentence structure a d arrangement
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Post by Chigozie Anuli Mbadugha »

Nice short story. I understood the beginning, but I would have liked to understand the gesture the boy made which the pastor could not divulge to the parents. Well done!
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Post by rohan123 »

Understand the beginning of the story, but not able to understand the end. please help me to understand the end and moral of the story.
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Post by Betty Chebet123 »

cohesion and coherence has been observed by the author.
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Post by crediblereading2 »

Well, the pastor couldn't express the word used to him by the boy at the second report, therefore, the parents were correct for not scolding the boy. Fair is fair.
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