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A girl was living a very difficult life which was full of hurdles and problems but she had hope that one day will come when all these problems will change into solutions by their ownself... but after waiting for so long time she has seen no change in her life and faced lots of problems as she was facing and finally she has committed a good friendship with all her problems and decided to live her life with great strength and power...
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The story is short, short sentences are the best, and also the writing needs to be well punctuated, they were some grammatical mistakes, the main topic is hope, at the end of the story, an element of hope is not found, since the character does not fight problems, but gives up, giving up is not a sign of power, but a sign of weakness, they is potential for you, you must always stick to the topic.
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Post by Chigozie Anuli Mbadugha »

Nice try. You need to write shorter sentences and in a more active voice that resounds hope. I enjoyed reading it though. Well done!
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