A Good Neighbour

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Ayobami Kehinde
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A Good Neighbour

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A few minutes ago, I heard a knock on my door. I hurried downstairs to see who it was. It must be the pest control people that I learnt will be coming every second Monday and Tuesday of the month, I thought in my head. On opening the door, I saw a middle-aged man with a big shoulder bag, smiling and pointing his finger. I still thought he came for pest control until he spoke up, his finger towards my door.
"Your key."
My gaze shifted immediately to my door and there was my key, in the lock. My right palm flew to my mouth as I exclaimed, "Jesus! Oh my God!"
I was so grateful and thanked him profusely. He told me he always tries to look out for other people and went away smiling.
And to think the key slept there in the lock all night and till this afternoon when that good neighbour noticed it. I'm thankful no evil person saw it.

©2014, Ayobami Temitope Kehinde
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Post by kunlebass »

Well done.Congrats for the review by the author.A simple message
conveyed which is It's good to be good
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I like this short story! I hope to see more from you.
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Post by Ayobami Kehinde »

kunlebass wrote:Well done.Congrats for the review by the author.A simple message
conveyed which is It's good to be good
Thanks!

-- 10 Jul 2017, 04:37 --
TheRavensWoods wrote:I like this short story! I hope to see more from you.
Thank you!
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Post by Mtsweni Nelsy »

He really is a good neighbor, you were fortunate.
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Mtsweni Nelsy wrote:He really is a good neighbor, you were fortunate.
Yes, I was very fortunate. I can't imagine if he was a crook.
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Post by Ama Idim »

Well done.... I like the story and the message it carries. We all should try to look out for one another.
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Post by MAXIMIXIZE »

GRATE
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Good story.Expecting more soon
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Post by Gifty Naa Akushia »

Thanks that is very educative, there's always an opportunity to learn something new from our surroundings.
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Post by Njengnjoro »

wow, what a good neighbour. I'm glad it turned out well
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Post by Gabyap »

A very Inspiring story, I hope such good people exist in plenty
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Post by Moodykelz_10 »

I liked this very much it was short but also very sweet.
Good writing
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Post by La Cabra »

That was short and sweet. Nice writing, too. Good stuff!
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Post by ms_vinkel »

Well, I may have been as forgetful as the character when it comes to keys. 😂 Good writing. Short and on-point. Thanks!
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