The sleepy girl in my journey
- Priyanka72282
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The sleepy girl in my journey
My heart broke a little as I see you getting ready to leave, i wanted to have a chat but I dare not. You were totally involved in your little world and I didn't want to disturb. As you pass by me like a gust of sweet breeze I realize it's time to move apart to our respective destinations...
- Jacinta Achieng
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when he said"Give me a chance and i will make your world so more beautiful than your dreams"
and then he/she went as far as confusing the readers even more by adding that "he wasnt there with her, that he would like to compensate". This is a total stranger that he just met in a Bus.
when the writer is ending his story, he now came out clearly that "its time to move to our respective destination.
He/she should be straight so that when one is reading the book, one should tel if they were together or just admiring a total stranger, who now a lights and they both go separate ways.
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I actually thought this was the prelude to a stalker / kidnapper / serial killer.
It was sweet that someone would daydream about s beautiful stranger. At some point, it it tips into creepy - for me that was 'one journey and I am all yours'. (The killer was the reference to 'I'll just let you sleep all the time')
There's a grammar question on the phrase 'I feel lighten'. It just doesn't read very well.
-- 01 Jun 2017, 02:28 --
The point of compensation was really building this elaborate dream of how life would be if they were together. The narrator is painting their future lives together where they talk about their dreams, their past, etc. The 'compensation' is a way of expressing 'I'd wish I'd been there for you, when things were tough'
I actually thought this was the prelude to a stalker / kidnapper / serial killer.
It was sweet that someone would daydream about s beautiful stranger. At some point, it it tips into creepy - for me that was 'one journey and I am all yours'. (The killer was the reference to 'I'll just let you sleep all the time')
There's a grammar question on the phrase 'I feel lighten'. It just doesn't read very well.
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