An Unexpected Client
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An Unexpected Client
"Your next client is here, Belle." I groan, dread consuming my body. I turn to the small girl in the doorway who is eyeing me with her steady, green eyes. "Yeah, give me a second. I'll be right there." I shakily lift myself up and look in the mirror. I brush my long, sleek hair and splash my face with water. I stare at my reflection and blink the water from my eyelashes. I make my way to the door. Prepared for the gust of cold wind, I swing open the door. Standing before me is not my expected client, Mr. Detariate with his horn-rimmed glasses and greasy hair. Standing before me is a girl identical to me.
I stammer, searching for the right words. "What are you doing here? How did you find me?" She grabs my hand and pulls me outside. "I'm taking you away from this wretched place, that's what I'm doing." I stare at my identical sister in bewilderment. "Annie, he will find me and he will kill me." She stops for a moment, deep in thought. Looking up at me, she replies, "That's a risk we have to take. You just have to trust that we can keep you safe." I grab hold of her hand again, her rings pressing against my fingers. Walking to her car, I do not look back at the house that has held me for the past year. I step into her car. Emotions are swirling around in my stomach, and I feel like I have to run to the toilet again. I take a deep breath and stare ahead. We speed off into the blizzard and into a new life.
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I think a fun twist would be to make the twin, Annie, a figment of Belle's imagination. "Annie" comes along and gives Belle the push she needs to escape from the abusive world that she is in and get back on her feet, so through the whole story it would be Annie supporting Belle until Belle has found her own power. The book could end with Belle realizing that there was never an Annie and she had the power all along.