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I agree, especially with the "show don't tell" bit. The fastest way to kill a story is to just tell everything that happened.Drakka Reader wrote: ↑29 Mar 2020, 14:29 I have no idea how this was meant to come across, but it is not good, and almost feels like a joke or spam. Try to use spaces and punctuation. Try also to use English more properly and don't just tell people what happened, that's not a story. You gotta actually show what happened, not just go "and then this happened, and then this", that's boring and draws in nobody.
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