A Good Neighbour

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A Good Neighbour

Post by Ayobami Kehinde » 26 Jun 2017, 16:51

A few minutes ago, I heard a knock on my door. I hurried downstairs to see who it was. It must be the pest control people that I learnt will be coming every second Monday and Tuesday of the month, I thought in my head. On opening the door, I saw a middle-aged man with a big shoulder bag, smiling and pointing his finger. I still thought he came for pest control until he spoke up, his finger towards my door.
"Your key."
My gaze shifted immediately to my door and there was my key, in the lock. My right palm flew to my mouth as I exclaimed, "Jesus! Oh my God!"
I was so grateful and thanked him profusely. He told me he always tries to look out for other people and went away smiling.
And to think the key slept there in the lock all night and till this afternoon when that good neighbour noticed it. I'm thankful no evil person saw it.

©2014, Ayobami Temitope Kehinde

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Post by kunlebass » 07 Jul 2017, 07:28

Well done.Congrats for the review by the author.A simple message
conveyed which is It's good to be good

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Post by TheRavensWoods » 07 Jul 2017, 21:31

I like this short story! I hope to see more from you.

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Post by Ayobami Kehinde » 10 Jul 2017, 04:37

kunlebass wrote:Well done.Congrats for the review by the author.A simple message
conveyed which is It's good to be good
Thanks!

-- 10 Jul 2017, 04:37 --
TheRavensWoods wrote:I like this short story! I hope to see more from you.
Thank you!

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Post by Mtsweni Nelsy » 15 Jul 2017, 14:49

He really is a good neighbor, you were fortunate.

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Post by Ayobami Kehinde » 18 Jul 2017, 12:43

Mtsweni Nelsy wrote:He really is a good neighbor, you were fortunate.
Yes, I was very fortunate. I can't imagine if he was a crook.

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Post by Ama Idim » 31 Jul 2017, 03:41

Well done.... I like the story and the message it carries. We all should try to look out for one another.

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Post by MAXIMIXIZE » 31 Jul 2017, 03:52

GRATE

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Post by Mfaro025 » 03 Aug 2017, 20:47

Good story.Expecting more soon

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Post by Gifty Naa Akushia » 12 Oct 2017, 13:38

Thanks that is very educative, there's always an opportunity to learn something new from our surroundings.

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Post by Njengnjoro » 31 Oct 2017, 05:35

wow, what a good neighbour. I'm glad it turned out well

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Post by Gabyap » 02 Nov 2017, 16:07

A very Inspiring story, I hope such good people exist in plenty

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