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I sit one day on my sofa at home, thinking about life and the short stories I write, when my 7-year-old nephew comes to me with a story I gave him.
"Did you like it?" I ask, motioning for him to sit down. He sits. "No," he says. "The ending is bad."
"What was wrong with the ending?" I ask him. The story I gave him ended with a boy winning a football (soccer) match. "they won." He says, in a tone which tells me he is angry.
I sigh. "Would you rather it ends with them losing?"
"No."
"So how would you like the story to end?" I ask, puzzled.
"I would like it to end with all the characters dying."
"Why?" I ask. "Did you not like them?"
"They were OK, " he says. “it's just… well, whenever I read a book or story I feel like I'm there. And when I get to the end I always feel sad because I won't know what else will happen to them in their life. Unless they are dead. In that case, I know what will happen to them. They will be eaten by worms." Then he looks up at me, smiles, and says: "can you please kill everyone next time?”
I think about the wise things he said.
I tell him I will.
I take out a knife.
I cut his head off.
He dies.
I turn the knife around.
I commit suicide.
THE END
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Post by Kgomotso Maje »

Thought provoking, especially the part about wondering what else happens to the characters in their live after the story ends. The ending is silly, but made me smile, so it's worth it.
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Post by DATo »

Clever !!! I like it. :lol:
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DATo wrote: 16 Feb 2022, 19:06 Clever !!! I like it. :lol:
thank you!:)
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Excellent. I often wonder what happens to the characters when the book ends.
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Jenni Schmitt wrote: 17 May 2022, 19:21 Excellent. I often wonder what happens to the characters when the book ends.
thank you:)
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That's good idea, excellent!
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Post by Jenni Schmitt »

I knew I wasn't the only one who wondered what happened to the characters after the end of the story. Not quite the happy ending I expected. Great short story.
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Post by Edris1378 »

The end is always sad!
Yes, everything always ends bitterly
From the end of coffee to the end of life and stories
But each one is a new beginning.
You wrote very beautifully and I enjoyed this multi-layered story
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Wow! this is intelligent work. It got laughing out loud.
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