The Squash Fairy

Use this forum to post short stories that you have written. This is for getting comments and constructive feedback. This is for original, creative works. You must post the actual text, no links.
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Nisha Ward
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Re: The Squash Fairy

Post by Nisha Ward » 31 Oct 2019, 10:51

Well,that was charming. Re your tone, I think if you extended the story a little more and talked about how the characters felt with some detail it might work, but personally I liked it a lot.
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