Official Review: Masterpiece in Your Heart by S.Sulianah

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Official Review: Masterpiece in Your Heart by S.Sulianah

Post by bookowlie » 09 May 2018, 10:28

[Following is an official OnlineBookClub.org review of "Masterpiece in Your Heart" by S.Sulianah.]
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2 out of 4 stars
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Masterpiece in Your Heart by S. Sulianah is a collection of twenty-six poems about love and, to a lesser extent, friendship. The poems were written over a period of four years, from 2013 to 2017. There is an emphasis on the author’s feelings about past loves rather than capturing scenic imagery or thoughts about various topics.

It is difficult to critique poetry about the subject of love. Even the slightest criticism can be viewed as stomping on someone’s very personal feelings. Also, free verse is hard to analyze as there are no set rules about syllables or structure. That being said, I believe this style of poetry should have some sort of smooth flow just like any other writing. Unfortunately, there is an awkward flow in many of the pieces in this collection. The stanzas and descriptions go off on tangents and sometimes don’t even feel like they are part of the same poem. It’s as if random adjectives and thoughts are thrown together on paper, yet the phrases are not coordinated in a cohesive way that makes sense to the reader. At times it felt like I was reading a draft that had potential once the author would revise and polish it.

There are a few poems that I found memorable. “Growing Like a Seed” has clear imagery with powerful phrasing – “the clattering of the bits and pieces, the clicks of movements.” “A Decade of You” is a standout as the author reminisces about a past love more than a decade later – “seems there are still layers of you in me, though I had tried to peel off every minute of them.”

The format of the book is somewhat disjointed. The titles of the poems are not always displayed in a consistent way. Some titles are included at the top of the poem and others are on the previous or next page. The inconsistent format gave the collection a haphazard feel and I had to go back at times to figure out which title went with which poem. In the case of titles shown on the page after the poem, it was initially unclear if the poem was the second page of the previous poem.

Full-page photos are scattered throughout the book, such as the Eiffel Tower, London Bridge, a person pulling a sled through the snow, skyscrapers, etc. The pictures appear to have no connection to the text and seem like filler or have meaning that is obvious only to the author.

I rate this book 2 out of 4 stars. Although the collection is heartfelt, I found it difficult to connect with many of the poems in any meaningful way. Some of the pieces contain individual phrases that are thought-provoking, but the overall meaning is often obscure. I would recommend this book to readers who enjoy free verse poetry and can sift through the vague observations to find the occasional gem.

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Post by gali » 13 May 2018, 00:24

A collection of poems about love and friendship sounds nice. Too bad about disjointed format and awkward flow of the poems. I am not fond of poetry, free verse or otherwise, so I will pass. Thank you for the sensitive review!
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Post by Libs_Books » 13 May 2018, 03:11

Thanks for this review - as you say, it's a difficult task to criticise writing that is clearly deeply felt. The examples you quoted, though lovely, do really sound more like chopped-up prose than poetry, even allowing for free verse.

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Post by sanjus » 13 May 2018, 03:20

The review gives the idea that this book is having good poems but it has problems with formating. The review score may indicate the author to rewrite the book into a good piece of work.

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Post by Laura Ungureanu » 13 May 2018, 03:42

I think this book has potential. From you review, I get the impression that the poetry is good, but sometimes unclear. And that can be fixed. I am sure the poems have some value, even if they seem hard to understand sometimes.

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Post by Ginnamassa19 » 13 May 2018, 03:56

Thank you for your critique! I agree that poetry is subjective and therefore hard to really review, but I think you've done a really good job with this book :) I was thinking of checking it out, but eh, inconsistent formatting is kind of a turn-off :P

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Post by gen_g » 13 May 2018, 04:18

Free verse sounds pretty interesting, but it is a pity that it seemed disjointed. I do agree that poetry is subjective, but this book would probably be a pass for me. Thank you for your detailed review.

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Post by Kemunto lucy » 13 May 2018, 05:57

Poetry touches the heart in a very special way. It arouses the deepest feelings and it brings healing. This book is my kind of thing. Thank you for the nice review.

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Post by Katerina Katapodi » 13 May 2018, 06:39

The ''Masterpiece in your Heart'' a series of poems by Sulianah, includes poems of poetry refering to Love. What would be more beautiful than this!-I take into account the comments given by other reviewers on ''inconsistency'' of titles, and that soem poems to an extent were ''dispersed'' in regard to meaning and significances of words and phrases put together, that reduced status of worth of poems. Lack of cohesion, and verses not stated/expressed clearly in regard to messages that poet wants to give us.
HOWEVER, I think that only effort of a poet that wants to ''offer to art'' in this way, deserves respect. Poetry cannot control expression some times when it comes to feelings, specially when content of poems is about love, and ''less friendship''..Poet expresses him/herself in the way he/she can, and this great personal effort must be rewarded, whatever it is. Poet homself/herself can actually improve content, by improving format and words used.
By all means I would give 3 stars to poet, wishing them good luck in his/her future endeavors.

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Post by kislany » 13 May 2018, 08:19

I never really liked poems, I'm not sure why. The topic of the book did make me curious, but your points about not connecting dissuade me from looking into it any further. Thanks for another great review.

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Post by bookowlie » 13 May 2018, 11:39

Thanks everyone for the feedback. Free verse is difficult to critique, and even more so when it's about a person's intimate thoughts. Still, there should be some cohesiveness of thought.
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Post by kandscreeley » 13 May 2018, 16:46

I'm sorry this one didn't connect with you. I think photos included with poetry could make it more powerful. It's unfortunate that the pictures did not fit with the words. The disjointed nature of the verse is also disappointing. All in all, I don't think I would enjoy this collection. Thanks for sharing this with us, though.
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Post by Kendra M Parker » 13 May 2018, 17:56

I always appreciate it when a reviewer does the hard job of reading a book and helping me decide whether or not to read it. The title of this book was eye-catching, so I am glad to know that it is not really the sort of thing that I would normally like to read. Poetry just isn’t much my thing, and if the formatting makes it even more difficult, then I will definitely leave this one behind. Thanks for the good review!

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Post by Aubrey Cana Laine » 14 May 2018, 07:33

Too bad about the low rating. The book's cover and title definitely interested me, but if the poems themselves as well as the formatting make it difficult to enjoy, then I'll have to pass on this one. Thank you for sharing your thoughts with us.

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Post by 420waystoreachthesun » 14 May 2018, 09:05

I just really didn't like the title, so I wouldn't have picked up the book anyway. But thank you for your wonderful review!

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