Official Review: Life of ups and downs by Walker

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Re: Official Review: Life of ups and downs by Walker

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I agree. It has a really nice premise, just needs some work.

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From your review, this story has so much potential. An additional round of editing will iron out the issues you mentioned.
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Well the story needs a little bit of sugery
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Thank you for checking it out!
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Post by Gunnar Ohberg »

Under fifty pages is hardly a novella. Rushed and disingenuous... I wonder what the point of writing this story was.
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I could see the point the author was trying to get across, however, trying to justify emotion within such a limited amount of space is just hard to get.
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Post by bookowlie »

These types of reviews are always difficult to write. You did a great job giving good, constructive criticism. Errors in a published book are always annoying, but it's very unprofessional to have so many in such a short book. Also, it's a little weird that the main character's name isn't stated until very late in the story. Hope your next book is more enjoyable to read.
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I hope so too!
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Post by Chevyd »

I thought the story was too rushed and way too Short. It needed a little bit more creativity into climax
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Agreed!
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This is the first review I've seen with a 1 star. I'm so sorry to hear that it wants as enjoyable as it could have been. Good honest review.
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I like your honest review. Too bad about the errors. I hope that the author would work harder to remove them.
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Post by amwidau71+ »

on my side, I like the story its very interesting
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Thanks for checking it out!
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Post by jessicaiann »

Besides the spelling errors I thought this book was a great read even though it was a short story. I enjoyed the description she put into the book.
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