Writing Challenge (opening lines to a novel)

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Re: Writing Challenge (opening lines to a novel)

Post by Brandi Noelle » 26 Oct 2017, 15:08

"Red stilettos. It was the red stilettos he remembered most clearly. It was funny how the most important moments of his life could be clouded in such shadows. But then, he recalled that he had thought of her as the Shadow Woman, and it actually wasn’t that funny at all."

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Post by yellosteel » 31 Oct 2017, 13:55

Brandi Noelle wrote:"Red stilettos. It was the red stilettos he remembered most clearly. It was funny how the most important moments of his life could be clouded in such shadows. But then, he recalled that he had thought of her as the Shadow Woman, and it actually wasn’t that funny at all."
.....great!

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Post by Brandi Noelle » 01 Nov 2017, 18:30

yellosteel wrote:
Brandi Noelle wrote:"Red stilettos. It was the red stilettos he remembered most clearly. It was funny how the most important moments of his life could be clouded in such shadows. But then, he recalled that he had thought of her as the Shadow Woman, and it actually wasn’t that funny at all."
.....great!
Thank you, yellosteel! I appreciate the feedback.

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Post by Lincolnshirelass » 02 Nov 2017, 06:01

When Hannah awoke, the sound of early birdsong and the sparkling sunlight streaming through the window told her it was going to be a glorious summer's day. It took a split second for it to dawn on her. When she had fallen asleep, the house had been snowbound. And it had not been this house.
An Eye for an Eye only ends up making the whole world blind.

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Post by MorningSky » 07 Jan 2018, 14:00

A cold and dreary morning was what greeted Haley the moment she stepped foot on her front yard. With an umbrella on one hand and her small bag on her back, she prayed to whoever was listening that her biology teacher wasn't present today.

--I tried.

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Post by Serena_Charlotte » 11 Jan 2018, 15:46

Most people are driven to show the world that they are unquestionably happy. This delusion is what keeps people sane in our world. But without this seemingly flawed philosophy of delusion we would be subject to the unrelenting fear which was offered by the world we lived in.
Where is the line between insanity and creativity?
Is the reality of the world different from how we perceive and experience it in our minds? Does physical reality exist apart from the human mind?

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Post by Jessie118 » 11 Jan 2018, 22:52

kbeckmeyer wrote:
30 May 2016, 22:47
If you're happy and you know it, don't try to sell your grandmother's underpants on ebay. It doesn't matter how famous she is, or how badly you need an extra paycheck. Don't.
haha, I love this one!

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