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Review of Bambara
[Following is a volunteer review of "Bambara" by Joseph Eidelberg.]
This book, Bambara , by Joseph Eidelberg, is a story written in first person about his personal experiences while traveling through monasteries in Africa. He shows how practices and traditions followed can be related back to Jewish traditions or in the religious book the Bible. The book has some illustrations to help depict and define some rituals towards the end.
I think that the structure he wrote the book on and turned his personal experiences into a story was very well done. It made it all more interesting and easier to read rather than just reading a book of information. There was a lot of side information that was given to give pretense on situations or what was happening, why, and where. You learn a little about the author as well and his childhood and it's interesting to me how he defies the common things found in society about religion and what a hobby would be. He went and practiced a religion, but it didn't make him more spiritual like it's thought to do which is what led to his hobby: finding others religions and the extent they go to to be "purified". Additionally, the descriptions and words help create a more vivid picture in your mind as your reading. It's as if you're actually at the place yourself. Each chapter gives a new cultural view, making the book enticing in which he explains what some verses in the Bible mean and how they relate to traditions followed today in places he visited.
However, due to the extent of background information given within each part or scene on each page the sentences became run on and very wordy. The use of commas were abused often leading to way too many of them. I believe that if the author restructures his sentences or moves some words around there will be a better flow to the storyline. It was often choppy and I had to go back and reread a couple of times to get an understanding of what he was trying to portray. Some of the choices of words used weren't maybe the best, I understood what he was trying to use them for but there were more simpler and better ones.It also was easier to read and understand the longer it got. The commas ended up making more sense as I went along, however, there were still some places that could've been better.
For example, page 11, paragraph 1, line 6, "Disfigured beggars fill in the alleys, turning to the mercy of passersby for donation..". Instead of passersby extend it to those passing by or strangers. As well as that sentence is run on and it doesn't flow due to all of the commas. I think just taking away the comma at and would make a big difference. This is just one example in the book early on. Furthermore on page 80 another example would be when the author talked about the meaning of Kuro-Turo it's kind of just thrown there it doesn't flow at all.
This book would be good for people who like to read books on adventure and like to learn a little about a different culture. The different steps into religions or the pieces that lead to the significance of certain scriptures or prayers can be learned in this book, which I found to be very interesting and informational. I do recommend reading this book because it's very engaging. I rate this book 3 out of 4 .
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Bambara
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This book, Bambara , by Joseph Eidelberg, is a story written in first person about his personal experiences while traveling through monasteries in Africa. He shows how practices and traditions followed can be related back to Jewish traditions or in the religious book the Bible. The book has some illustrations to help depict and define some rituals towards the end.
I think that the structure he wrote the book on and turned his personal experiences into a story was very well done. It made it all more interesting and easier to read rather than just reading a book of information. There was a lot of side information that was given to give pretense on situations or what was happening, why, and where. You learn a little about the author as well and his childhood and it's interesting to me how he defies the common things found in society about religion and what a hobby would be. He went and practiced a religion, but it didn't make him more spiritual like it's thought to do which is what led to his hobby: finding others religions and the extent they go to to be "purified". Additionally, the descriptions and words help create a more vivid picture in your mind as your reading. It's as if you're actually at the place yourself. Each chapter gives a new cultural view, making the book enticing in which he explains what some verses in the Bible mean and how they relate to traditions followed today in places he visited.
However, due to the extent of background information given within each part or scene on each page the sentences became run on and very wordy. The use of commas were abused often leading to way too many of them. I believe that if the author restructures his sentences or moves some words around there will be a better flow to the storyline. It was often choppy and I had to go back and reread a couple of times to get an understanding of what he was trying to portray. Some of the choices of words used weren't maybe the best, I understood what he was trying to use them for but there were more simpler and better ones.It also was easier to read and understand the longer it got. The commas ended up making more sense as I went along, however, there were still some places that could've been better.
For example, page 11, paragraph 1, line 6, "Disfigured beggars fill in the alleys, turning to the mercy of passersby for donation..". Instead of passersby extend it to those passing by or strangers. As well as that sentence is run on and it doesn't flow due to all of the commas. I think just taking away the comma at and would make a big difference. This is just one example in the book early on. Furthermore on page 80 another example would be when the author talked about the meaning of Kuro-Turo it's kind of just thrown there it doesn't flow at all.
This book would be good for people who like to read books on adventure and like to learn a little about a different culture. The different steps into religions or the pieces that lead to the significance of certain scriptures or prayers can be learned in this book, which I found to be very interesting and informational. I do recommend reading this book because it's very engaging. I rate this book 3 out of 4 .
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Bambara
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Latest Review: Bambara by Joseph Eidelberg
