1 out of 4 stars
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The Daughter of Tommy the Killer is the second book of a book series written by Larry Tinsley. The story follows Natasha, the daughter of a serial killer named Tommy Bones. When her father is killed by the locals, one hundred years ago, he swears that he will come back to take revenge. Natasha, who has a special gift of growing old whenever she wishes, decides to wait until her father returns to put an end to him once and for all. The years go by, Tommy Bones rises from the dead to fulfill his promise, and Natasha is the only one who can stop him.
While the plot intrigued me to read this book, as I'm a lover of this genre, I was soon let down. In the next few paragraphs, I will try to explain thoroughly the reasons why I rated this book so low while trying to avoid spoilers, in case someone wants to read it.
First of all, this book hasn't been proofread at all. I highly doubt the writer read it twice before it was published. Sadly, I was able to find more than ten errors on the very first page. Having so many punctuation and grammatical errors made it extremely hard to read. There were no commas, the sentences were very long, sometimes repeating themselves, and overall there was no coherence. As for the grammatical mistakes, there are many misspelled words or even wrong words, and the author always used "was" when it should be "were".
In addition, even if we overlook the fact that the book was not proofread, it was very hard to follow the story and understand the timeline or the way the scenes were following one another. Since, as I previously mentioned, I don't want to give away spoilers, I'll give a vague example to explain what I mean. Someone in the book gets pregnant, and after approximately 3 weeks she is giving birth to a healthy baby. This example proves my point. I won't give you more details, but, since the book is small, it was easy for me to recheck the timeline of this incident, and I'm pretty sure I wasn't confused. Things like that kept happening in the book constantly. Thus, characters made no sense and had no development. I couldn't understand what was happening most of the time. I was feeling like I was reading a draft and not the original book.
Unfortunately, I have to give this book 1 out of 4 stars. I really want to support aspiring authors because I know how they feel, so I always try to find something positive to write, despite my negative review. The plot, as an idea, was really good and it could turn into a very interesting book. Thus, I believe that the writer should not give up and rewrite this book. When he does, he should send it for professional proofreading. If you like a quick adventure you can read it, but it's plain to see that I don't believe this book is ready to be read yet.
The Daughter of Tommy the Killer
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