Official Review: Another World's Kronicles Nomadic Warriors

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Official Review: Another World's Kronicles Nomadic Warriors

Post by Mely918 » 28 Oct 2018, 21:00

[Following is an official OnlineBookClub.org review of "Another World's Kronicles Nomadic Warriors" by D.R. Simpson (Donald R. Simpson).]
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1 out of 4 stars
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The Age of Giants by D.R. Simpson is the first book in a fantasy series. It follows the trials of men at the hands of the ruthless giants called Troguares from the Mighty Brim Mountains. The two races fight countless battles, and each time the giants find themselves victorious. They imprison and enslave the surviving men and women. This goes on for generations until the name of both giants and men gradually starts to fade away.

The giants’ leader is a warlord known as Obizar. Even after men and giants begin to disappear, the name Obizar is a constant source of fear for men. Many think he is immortal, which heightens that sense of fright. All hope now lies on the people of Tyrus, who show promise of rising against Obizar and the Troguares. If successful, these people could restore the name of mankind as well as peace to the race.

Even though the premise for this book is decent, there were a variety of problems with this story. The writing, for starters, is very poor. There were numerous grammatical mistakes on every page of the book. I caught ten errors in the first two paragraphs alone. There were all sorts of errors, such as misspellings, missing punctuation marks, inconsistencies, redundancies, etc. Page one, for instance, reads, “Fore it is written that in the beginning God created the heavens and the earth and all living creatures that dwelled upon it.” Countless mistakes like that heavily distracted me while reading this novel.

The author also made the mistake of telling almost the entire story rather than showing it. The book became very disengaging from the start, as a result. The battle scenes, especially, were difficult to read. Scenes such as those need to be shown through actions and descriptions. Since it was all told instead, it made all the battles seem repetitive and boring. Additionally, the dialogue was pretty unrealistic. The characters all spoke as if they were reciting poetry, which took away from the story, too. There was also hardly any character development, making all the characters bland and one-dimensional. Part of the problem there was that the author had a tendency to kill off characters before the reader could form any type of attachment to them.

I rate this book 1 out of 4 stars. The idea had potential, and if written properly, it could’ve been a pleasant read. However, the book’s poor execution made for an unsatisfactory novel. I think the author ought to completely rewrite this story and have an editor look at it as well. Unfortunately, I would not recommend this book to anyone.

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Post by kandscreeley » 30 Oct 2018, 10:10

It's too bad that this has been written so poorly. I've read books that told the entire story instead of showing. It really becomes quite boring. I'm definitely going to have to pass on this book. I admire you for persevering through this one until the end. Hope your next book is better.
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Post by wendos » 30 Oct 2018, 11:42

Yes, the premise looks good, but the numerous errors have let the book down. A good editing would make it perfect.

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Post by fredrick otieno » 01 Nov 2018, 08:10

Great idea but quite unfortunate that the author got most things wrong. Anyway, i believe its not yet late and the writer could still correct the problems and make this book great.

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Post by daydreaming reader » 01 Nov 2018, 20:17

Wow. I agree that the premise for the book is decent. Thank you for the honest review.
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Post by Galnius » 01 Nov 2018, 22:28

10 mistakes within 2 paragraphs is a bit much for my tastes.

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Post by Robert Fred » 02 Nov 2018, 11:29

I find it very troubling to read something that dosen´t flow. To have characters names that you can´t even pronounce and talking in poetic ways, not for me . Thanks for your review and i´ll pass on this one as well.

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Post by Miriam Molina » 08 Nov 2018, 18:49

It seems the giants spoiled everything, including the writing. Funny that page one started that way. Golfers yell " Fore!" to warn bystanders before making a mighty swing. It might be a warning that the book is dangerous. Lol!

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Post by Franc93 » 10 Nov 2018, 06:45

It is indeed disheartening that a promising story line as this is plagued with a lot of grammatical errors. It really takes away the joy from reading. The plot was strong and one of a kind but i guess the author fell short.
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