Official Review: Blaine's Legacy by Scotti Jones

Please use this sub-forum to discuss any fantasy or science fiction books or series.
Forum rules
You must limit each topic thread in this section to only one book or only one series. Make the title of the topic the name of the book, and if possible also include the author's name. If you want to allow spoilers, you must include the word spoilers in the title of the topic, otherwise spoilers are prohibited.
User avatar
MarisaRose
Posts: 1027
Joined: 03 Sep 2016, 15:34
2018 Reading Goal: 50
2017 Reading Goal: 25
2018 Reading Goal Completion: 8
2017 Reading Goal Completion: 400
Favorite Book: Harry Potter and the Prisoner of Azkaban
Currently Reading: The Sleepwalker
Bookshelf Size: 234
Reviewer Page: onlinebookclub.org/reviews/by-marisarose.html
Latest Review: "Memories of a "Warrior"" by Richard A. Balliet
Reading Device: B00JG8GOWU

Official Review: Blaine's Legacy by Scotti Jones

Post by MarisaRose » 14 Jul 2017, 13:20

[Following is an official OnlineBookClub.org review of "Blaine's Legacy" by Scotti Jones.]
Book Cover
1 out of 4 stars
Share This Review


Blaine’s Legacy by Scotti Jones is a fantasy novel about a sixteen year-old-boy with a laundry list of supernatural abilities. From super-healing powers and telekinesis, to spell casting and empathy, Blaine has it all; not to mention he’s an all-star athlete as well. The death of Blaine’s boyfriend, Brent, has left him down and depressed as of late, but Blaine doesn’t have time to mourn because he is being hunted by the evil, ghost-like being, Shadeaux, who has pursued Blaine his entire life.

To begin, it is evident when reading Blaine’s Legacy that the work is not ready for publication. The formatting is inconsistent throughout the narrative: only some paragraphs are indented, random line breaks appear continuously, and punctuation errors are abundant. Even more irksome is the lack of scene breaks; paragraphs jump from one set of characters and events to another with no indication of the change in setting. Lastly, many of the characters’ names are incredibly similar, making the story difficult to follow. For example, Blaine, Blake and Brent are all important characters, as are Jamie and Jimmy and Keldar and Kalvyn.

The writing itself suffers from a lack of quality as well. Simply put, the writing isn’t engaging. The narrative relies heavily on telling instead of showing. Throughout the story, the plot ceases to move forward as the narrative shifts from story progression to info-dumps; this even occurs in the first few pages where, instead of seeing how Blaine’s powers work, we are told via a long-winded exposition what Blaine’s powers are, how he got them, and who taught him to use them.

On top of the boring writing, there is a serious deficiency in the novel’s focus. Plot devices include monsters from other dimensions, Greek gods, wormholes, giant spiders, magi, shaman, teleportation, astral projection, a council of elders, and time travel, to name a few. Plus, Blaine and his friends are avid pot-heads who once used Blaine’s powers to grow magic pot plants and subsequently run the cartel out of town because they couldn't compete with Blaine and company's low prices. The haphazard incorporation of stoner stereotypes with what seems like every fantasy element known to the genre was overwhelming.

The story had some positive traits, but the majority of those traits were all borrowed from other works. There is the bad guy that needs to take over a body because he only exists in an incorporeal form (Voldemort), and the teenage hero who is hunted by the bad guy because the hero is the reason for the bad guy’s current misfortune (Harry Potter). Blaine is even given an invisibility cloak and an amazing suit of armor made from a metal described very similarly to Mithril. The lack of creativity in the plotting began to feel exasperating and worthy of many an eye-roll.

Regrettably, this novel is still in draft form; the formatting issues, expository writing style, blatant reproduction of ideas, and remarkable lack of focus lead me to give Blaine’s Legacy 1 out of 4 stars. In its current state, I cannot recommend this book.

******
Blaine's Legacy
View: on Bookshelves | on Amazon

Like MarisaRose's review? Post a comment saying so!
"No two persons ever read the same book." -Edmund Wilson

User avatar
jamesokunmd
Posts: 118
Joined: 16 Jun 2017, 16:31
2018 Reading Goal: 200
2017 Reading Goal: 100
2018 Reading Goal Completion: 0
2017 Reading Goal Completion: 6
Currently Reading:
Bookshelf Size: 194
Reviewer Page: onlinebookclub.org/reviews/by-jamesokunmd.html
Latest Review: "Yesterday" by Samyann

Post by jamesokunmd » 16 Jul 2017, 10:54

Congrats on a very insightful review! Constructive criticism should help the author improve the work product.

User avatar
Athena Moon
Posts: 186
Joined: 27 Jun 2017, 13:40
2018 Reading Goal: 66
2017 Reading Goal: 30
2018 Reading Goal Completion: 0
2017 Reading Goal Completion: 20
Favorite Author: Paulo Coelho
Favorite Book: The Lovely Bones
Currently Reading: Holy Here Wholly You
Bookshelf Size: 48
Reviewer Page: onlinebookclub.org/reviews/by-athena-moon.html
Latest Review: "Strong Heart" by Charlie Sheldon
fav_author_id: 2451

Post by Athena Moon » 16 Jul 2017, 11:10

I can only imagine how patient you had to be to finish the book. It does not sound like readable one. Still, thanks for your effort!

charlesjr2
Posts: 146
Joined: 10 Mar 2017, 10:37
2017 Reading Goal: 15
2017 Reading Goal Completion: 13
Currently Reading:
Bookshelf Size: 12
Reviewer Page: onlinebookclub.org/reviews/by-charlesjr2.html
Latest Review: "Escape" by Belle Ami

Post by charlesjr2 » 16 Jul 2017, 12:29

I think that this review is very helpful. It saves us the stress of actually going through the book

User avatar
Quirinius
Posts: 50
Joined: 30 Jun 2017, 03:06
2017 Reading Goal: 50
2017 Reading Goal Completion: 94
Favorite Book: The Limitless Real Estate Leader
Currently Reading: Sylvio: Past and Present
Bookshelf Size: 186
Reading Device: B00JG8GOWU

Post by Quirinius » 16 Jul 2017, 12:43

Well more encouraged to read the book from the start of the review.

User avatar
kandscreeley
Special Discussion Leader
Posts: 3526
Joined: 31 Dec 2016, 20:31
2018 Reading Goal: 115
2017 Reading Goal: 100
2018 Reading Goal Completion: 6
2017 Reading Goal Completion: 94
Currently Reading: End of the Last Great Kingdom
Bookshelf Size: 136
Reviewer Page: onlinebookclub.org/reviews/by-kandscreeley.html
Latest Review: "The Grace Emancipation" by Charlotte Hawkins

Post by kandscreeley » 16 Jul 2017, 13:56

Wow! I'm sorry this book was so disappointing. I hate having to give out 1 star reviews. With all that's wrong (the formatting, character's names being similar, telling instead of showing), I think I'll skip this one!
“There is no friend as loyal as a book.”
― Ernest Hemingway

User avatar
Mercy Bolo
Posts: 708
Joined: 31 May 2017, 03:44
2018 Reading Goal: 36
2018 Reading Goal Completion: 16
Favorite Book: The Wisdom and Peace of the Teachings of the Tao Te Ching
Currently Reading: And Then I Met Margaret
Bookshelf Size: 124
Reviewer Page: onlinebookclub.org/reviews/by-mercy-bolo.html
Latest Review: "A Tale of Imagine" by Howard Mack

Post by Mercy Bolo » 16 Jul 2017, 20:46

Thank you for being honest. Some books are just unreadable.
"The minimum requirement for a dream is a safe place to lay your head."
~OluTimehin Adegbeye

User avatar
ButterscotchCherrie
Posts: 408
Joined: 29 Apr 2017, 02:00
2018 Reading Goal: 104
2017 Reading Goal: 50
2018 Reading Goal Completion: 2
2017 Reading Goal Completion: 50
Currently Reading: On the Shortness of Life
Bookshelf Size: 60
Reviewer Page: onlinebookclub.org/reviews/by-butterscotchcherrie.html
Latest Review: "Elastic Girl" by Olivia Rana
Reading Device: B00JG8GOWU
Location: Central Europe

Post by ButterscotchCherrie » 17 Jul 2017, 09:35

This was very instructive on some of the pitfalls of self-publishing, or at any rate doing so too soon without the benefit of some sort of beta reading or editing. Excessively similar names, for example, is something a second pair of eyes can spot right away. And yes, it's boring how many Rowling and Tolkien imitators are out there.

User avatar
Pm7lucas
Posts: 223
Joined: 14 Jul 2017, 15:52
2017 Reading Goal: 70
2017 Reading Goal Completion: 21
Currently Reading: The Dancing Barber
Bookshelf Size: 62
Reviewer Page: onlinebookclub.org/reviews/by-pm7lucas.html
Latest Review: "Escape" by Belle Ami
Reading Device: 1400699169
Location: Catawissa, PA

Post by Pm7lucas » 17 Jul 2017, 20:51

Thank you for this insightful review. Unfortunately, not every story idea turns out to be a readable book. I find it unbelievably annoying when I find a lot of typos and other mistakes in a book I am trying to read, although if the story is captivating, I will try to ignore the lack of proofreading. Since there are other problems with the story and not just grammar and punctuation mistakes, I think I will skip this one.

User avatar
LadyClaire
Posts: 286
Joined: 11 Jul 2017, 23:46
2017 Reading Goal: 50
2017 Reading Goal Completion: 4
Currently Reading: Keys to Tetouan
Bookshelf Size: 95
Reviewer Page: onlinebookclub.org/reviews/by-ladyclaire.html
Latest Review: "My Trip To Adele" by R.I.Alyaseer and A. I Alyaseer

Post by LadyClaire » 18 Jul 2017, 12:54

boohoo! I get teary-eyed when a seemingly good book turns out to be disappointing. Anyways, thanks for the honest review. Constructive criticisms are always welcome. I think I'll avoid this one.
To be without some of the things you want is an indispensable part of happiness.
-Bertrand Russel

User avatar
raikyuu
Posts: 230
Joined: 28 Jun 2017, 21:19
2017 Reading Goal: 30
2017 Reading Goal Completion: 116
Favorite Book: The Republic
Currently Reading: A History of Western Philosophy
Bookshelf Size: 42
Reviewer Page: onlinebookclub.org/reviews/by-raikyuu.html
Latest Review: "Sho-Rap Highway" by Robin Whiteplume

Post by raikyuu » 18 Jul 2017, 22:38

I'm sure the author can learn from his experiences on how to write a better book. This work doesn't necessarily define him, he can still improve a lot further.

Doesn't anyone notice a male-version mary sue in Blaine's Legacy?
What should I do with my life?

"You don't have to do anything."

User avatar
kipkemboi
Posts: 1
Joined: 19 Jul 2017, 04:23
Bookshelf Size: 0

Post by kipkemboi » 19 Jul 2017, 04:38

post no#12 by kipkemboi>>
"The power of reasoning determine where you will land"

User avatar
Kashb
Posts: 1
Joined: 08 Jul 2017, 15:45
Currently Reading:
Bookshelf Size: 2

Post by Kashb » 19 Jul 2017, 05:25

I love the story lines :tiphat:

beatriceanyango
Posts: 12
Joined: 14 Jul 2017, 02:40
Currently Reading:
Bookshelf Size: 16
Reading Device: B00GDQDRPK

Post by beatriceanyango » 20 Jul 2017, 04:33

its suprising.

User avatar
Afuglsan
Posts: 318
Joined: 05 Jun 2017, 11:20
2018 Reading Goal: 101
2017 Reading Goal: 100
2018 Reading Goal Completion: 0
2017 Reading Goal Completion: 59
Currently Reading:
Bookshelf Size: 5458
Reviewer Page: onlinebookclub.org/reviews/by-afuglsan.html
Latest Review: "STARLESS and Bible Black" by Gerard DiLeo

Post by Afuglsan » 27 Jul 2017, 20:53

This book seems to take many different directions. The author should probably pick a few special abilities and a few supernatural entities instead of trying to use them all. Too bad the novel is written poorly. The cover looked so promising!

Post Reply

Return to “Sci-Fi and Fantasy Books”