Official Review: An Adventurous Summer Vacation

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Official Review: An Adventurous Summer Vacation

Post by KristyKhem » 11 Jun 2018, 17:43

[Following is an official OnlineBookClub.org review of "An Adventurous Summer Vacation" by Krahtay Gaylah.]
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1 out of 4 stars
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An Adventurous Summer Vacation is a short story by Krahtay Gaylah. The story describes the adventures of the Herman family when they visited their grandparents for the summer vacation. The three cousins, Markie, Ryan, and Kara travel to the Duster Village Water Park in Dallas, the Nature Plaza Park in Seattle, and the Rocket Planet Space Center in Austin with their parents and grandparents. Along the way, the children befriend Max, a friendly bulldog. They also learn new things about volcanoes, rockets, and space exploration. They also explored possible occupations that interest them.

This book was very difficult for me to read. The writing did not flow well and was choppy at times. Some sentences were also strangely phrased, such as, ‘Further, walking in a fast pace and slowing down at some point, while making hand gestures to give brief history of some other things; Justin took us inside.’ It occurred to me that the author’s first language may not be English and this could have been the reason for the strangely written sentences.

In addition, the majority of the book consisted of meaningless dialogue that did not add value to the story. There were numerous mentions of, “Hmmm,” and “Uh-huh.” In addition, some incidents were also insignificant, such as the exact measurements of rooms and people’s heights. There was also one instance where the author used four sentences to describe the reason for sneezing.

However, the main issue I had with this book was the number of errors it contained. Reading this book became a chore and it was honestly a very frustrating experience because the errors distracted me from the story. Some examples of the errors which I noticed were wrongfully used words, lack of question marks at the end of sentences, use of capital letters where there should be common letters, lack of articles in some sentences, and incorrect spelling of some words.

Despite this, I liked the educational facts in the book. There were facts pertaining to volcanoes and space travel which would appeal to young science fans. Another positive thing about this story was that it contained a good lesson for young readers - to keep focused on your dreams and to keep working hard to achieve them, despite the challenges that may occur.

Unfortunately, these aspects were overshadowed by the poor writing and the multitude of errors. Therefore, I rate it 1 out of 4 stars. This book has the potential to be enjoyed by teenagers, but I would strongly recommend that it undergoes professional editing.

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Post by daniya__shah3 » 12 Jun 2018, 05:17

The way you have described the errors is already putting me off. I think grammar plays an essential role in helping with the flow of the story, no matter how good the story must be, if a book is poorly edited it loses some potential readers.
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Post by SamSim » 12 Jun 2018, 07:43

It's so disappointing to begin a book with anticipation and find that, due to problems that could have been easily avoided, it's a "chore" to read. That happened to me recently as well. I hope it undergoes more editing to reach its potential. Great review!
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Post by KristyKhem » 12 Jun 2018, 09:57

SamSim wrote:
12 Jun 2018, 07:43
It's so disappointing to begin a book with anticipation and find that, due to problems that could have been easily avoided, it's a "chore" to read. That happened to me recently as well. I hope it undergoes more editing to reach its potential. Great review!
Yes, it really is disappointing when you encounter a book like that :( Thanks for sharing your thoughts!

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Post by Helen_Combe » 13 Jun 2018, 03:43

Great review. I strongly feel that books aimed at young people should be really well edited since it’s not just the content that’s educational. The prose itself should be an example of well-written English.
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Post by ParadoxicalWoman » 13 Jun 2018, 04:34

I'm sorry to hear how frustrated you are in reading this book. However, I'm glad you are able to see the positive aspects of this book. Thank you for your honest review.
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Post by Sahani Nimandra » 13 Jun 2018, 10:23

First and foremost, thank you for a descriptive review. Secondly, the errors put me of bar when I came to a point in your review about the errors I stopped at whole in reading it. Thank you once again!
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Post by Dael Reader » 15 Jun 2018, 17:10

Just goes to show you, some of those "what did over the summer" stories are not all that good. I like your review though!

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Post by crediblereading2 » 16 Jun 2018, 10:55

This sounds like a very adventurous tale indeed. Max, the dog, adds more fun and frolic to the story. Thank you for a great review.

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Post by KristyKhem » 16 Jun 2018, 19:19

Dael Reader wrote:
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Just goes to show you, some of those "what did over the summer" stories are not all that good. I like your review though!
Very true! And thank you :)

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Post by JR Mercier » 21 Jun 2018, 04:11

It's such a shame when it's obvious that a book hasn't undergone professional editing. Hopefully, it will soon. Great review. Glad that you didn't sugarcoat it.
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