Did the author overuse emboldened subtitles in chapters?

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Re: Did the author overuse emboldened subtitles in chapters?

Post by Ferdinand_otieno » 07 Jun 2019, 21:17

evraealtana wrote:
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A well written story shouldn't need them, particularly if they're intrusive to the flow of the work. I agree with previous commentators - it would have been better without, I think.
It did feel like I was reading next to a commentator.

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Post by Ferdinand_otieno » 08 Jun 2019, 12:09

evraealtana wrote:
05 Jun 2019, 07:16
A well written story shouldn't need them, particularly if they're intrusive to the flow of the work. I agree with previous commentators - it would have been better without, I think.
Not exactly perfect, mind you, but better.

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Post by Ferdinand_otieno » 08 Jun 2019, 23:43

Ferdinand_otieno wrote:
07 Jun 2019, 21:17
evraealtana wrote:
05 Jun 2019, 07:16
A well written story shouldn't need them, particularly if they're intrusive to the flow of the work. I agree with previous commentators - it would have been better without, I think.
It did feel like I was reading next to a commentator.
They could have been used to hide secret clues to how huge some information in a chaptervmight be, and in that case, the author would have had to use it quite sparingly.

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Post by Ferdinand_otieno » 09 Jun 2019, 03:50

DC Brown wrote:
05 Jun 2019, 09:49
Ferdinand_otieno wrote:
01 Jun 2019, 08:54
From the beginning of the book, I encountered sentenses written in bold that seem to foretell too much of what was to happen. For me it felt a little bit overused since it would give away too much of the actions in the chapter.
What was your opinion on their use?
If you felt they were overused, then which chapter or scene did it for you?
(Mine was in the beginning of the book during a sexual scene between Cynthia and Sky... written as (This section is rated R) )
This may sound lame, but I really appreciated the "this section is rated R" I don't need to read that stuff. All I need is three little words "they had sex."
It does not sound lame, just different and unexpected.

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Post by Ferdinand_otieno » 09 Jun 2019, 14:31

evraealtana wrote:
05 Jun 2019, 07:16
A well written story shouldn't need them, particularly if they're intrusive to the flow of the work. I agree with previous commentators - it would have been better without, I think.
I completely agree with you.

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Post by IloveSpain01 » 09 Jun 2019, 14:52

I personally wasn't bothered by them, even if they gave away a bit of the story. Since almost every chapter chapter changed scenes, the author may have felt it was needed.

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Post by Ferdinand_otieno » 10 Jun 2019, 01:33

IloveSpain01 wrote:
09 Jun 2019, 14:52
I personally wasn't bothered by them, even if they gave away a bit of the story. Since almost every chapter chapter changed scenes, the author may have felt it was needed.
For me, the giving away partvof the story was annoying.

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Post by Ferdinand_otieno » 10 Jun 2019, 13:13

Ferdinand_otieno wrote:
10 Jun 2019, 01:33
IloveSpain01 wrote:
09 Jun 2019, 14:52
I personally wasn't bothered by them, even if they gave away a bit of the story. Since almost every chapter chapter changed scenes, the author may have felt it was needed.
For me, the giving away partvof the story was annoying.
For me, the giving away part *of the story was annoying.

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Post by VernaVi » 11 Jun 2019, 00:56

I agree. The frequent bold subtitles made me feel as though the author thought I needed to be told. I knew it was R rated, it's a sex scene. You make a really good point, thank you!

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Post by Ferdinand_otieno » 11 Jun 2019, 03:41

VernaVi wrote:
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I agree. The frequent bold subtitles made me feel as though the author thought I needed to be told. I knew it was R rated, it's a sex scene. You make a really good point, thank you!
True, it felt like I was being educated on the scenes in the book. It's never wise to assume your readers are stupid.

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Post by Ferdinand_otieno » 11 Jun 2019, 23:41

DC Brown wrote:
05 Jun 2019, 09:49
Ferdinand_otieno wrote:
01 Jun 2019, 08:54
From the beginning of the book, I encountered sentenses written in bold that seem to foretell too much of what was to happen. For me it felt a little bit overused since it would give away too much of the actions in the chapter.
What was your opinion on their use?
If you felt they were overused, then which chapter or scene did it for you?
(Mine was in the beginning of the book during a sexual scene between Cynthia and Sky... written as (This section is rated R) )
This may sound lame, but I really appreciated the "this section is rated R" I don't need to read that stuff. All I need is three little words "they had sex."
But it just wasn't for that only, it was done in every chapter highlighting menial things the protagonist did.

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Post by DC Brown » 12 Jun 2019, 09:54

Ferdinand_otieno wrote:
11 Jun 2019, 23:41
DC Brown wrote:
05 Jun 2019, 09:49
Ferdinand_otieno wrote:
01 Jun 2019, 08:54
From the beginning of the book, I encountered sentenses written in bold that seem to foretell too much of what was to happen. For me it felt a little bit overused since it would give away too much of the actions in the chapter.
What was your opinion on their use?
If you felt they were overused, then which chapter or scene did it for you?
(Mine was in the beginning of the book during a sexual scene between Cynthia and Sky... written as (This section is rated R) )
This may sound lame, but I really appreciated the "this section is rated R" I don't need to read that stuff. All I need is three little words "they had sex."
But it just wasn't for that only, it was done in every chapter highlighting menial things the protagonist did.
Yes, yes that is true. The only one I appreciated was that first one. By the end of the book the others were irritating as well. For me, though, they were not the most irritating of all the things that irritates me about the story.

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Post by Helene_2008 » 12 Jun 2019, 20:13

I'll admit it was definitely a different approach but I appreciated with the R rated scene so you were prepared for what was coming. I don't think it took away from the book and most did not allude to what was going to happen.

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Post by Ferdinand_otieno » 12 Jun 2019, 23:24

DC Brown wrote:
12 Jun 2019, 09:54
Ferdinand_otieno wrote:
11 Jun 2019, 23:41
DC Brown wrote:
05 Jun 2019, 09:49

This may sound lame, but I really appreciated the "this section is rated R" I don't need to read that stuff. All I need is three little words "they had sex."
But it just wasn't for that only, it was done in every chapter highlighting menial things the protagonist did.
Yes, yes that is true. The only one I appreciated was that first one. By the end of the book the others were irritating as well. For me, though, they were not the most irritating of all the things that irritates me about the story.
I completely agree with you.

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Post by Katherine Smith » 13 Jun 2019, 18:14

I think that subtitles in book throw off the flow of the book, but when they were bold in this book it was a little strange. My eyes automatically went to the bold text first which spoiled the story for me at times. I think that the author was maybe trying to do this as a warning, but it ended up being too jarring.
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