Did the author overuse emboldened subtitles in chapters?

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Re: Did the author overuse emboldened subtitles in chapters?

Post by Ferdinand_otieno » 13 Jun 2019, 19:52

Helene_2008 wrote:
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I'll admit it was definitely a different approach but I appreciated with the R rated scene so you were prepared for what was coming. I don't think it took away from the book and most did not allude to what was going to happen.
?..but to have in every single chapter?

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Post by Ferdinand_otieno » 14 Jun 2019, 09:13

Ferdinand_otieno wrote:
13 Jun 2019, 19:52
Helene_2008 wrote:
12 Jun 2019, 20:13
I'll admit it was definitely a different approach but I appreciated with the R rated scene so you were prepared for what was coming. I don't think it took away from the book and most did not allude to what was going to happen.
?..but to have in every single chapter?
One or twice ...or sporadic in the book is more than acceptable. Using them in every chapter removes the reader from the flow (however little) of the book.

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Post by Ferdinand_otieno » 15 Jun 2019, 11:06

Ferdinand_otieno wrote:
13 Jun 2019, 19:52
Helene_2008 wrote:
12 Jun 2019, 20:13
I'll admit it was definitely a different approach but I appreciated with the R rated scene so you were prepared for what was coming. I don't think it took away from the book and most did not allude to what was going to happen.
?..but to have in every single chapter?
To never be able to go well into a chapter without knowing the key events held within?
Unacceptable!

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Post by Nisha Ward » 16 Jun 2019, 18:47

Ferdinand_otieno wrote:
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heatherashley7 wrote:
02 Jun 2019, 15:54
I didn't really notice the bold titles at first but once I did I felt they were out of place. I'm not a big fan of subtitles in the first place. To me if a book is written well enough they should not need them, unless the book keeps jumping settings or back and forth between the future and the past.
Yeah, thanks. That is the only viable use of that amount of emboldened subtitles; to mention a change in setting or a change in narration.
I don't think it needs them even then because context clues or just a date stamp can do that just as well.
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Post by Nisha Ward » 16 Jun 2019, 18:48

Ferdinand_otieno wrote:
15 Jun 2019, 11:06
Ferdinand_otieno wrote:
13 Jun 2019, 19:52
Helene_2008 wrote:
12 Jun 2019, 20:13
I'll admit it was definitely a different approach but I appreciated with the R rated scene so you were prepared for what was coming. I don't think it took away from the book and most did not allude to what was going to happen.
?..but to have in every single chapter?
To never be able to go well into a chapter without knowing the key events held within?
Unacceptable!
Yeah. It was way too much giving away of the plot to actually be anything but annoying by the third chapter and it always broke the novel's flow too much.
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Post by Everydayadventure15 » 16 Jun 2019, 19:47

I wasn't bothered too much by them, except for the "rated R" one. That threw me off and I had no idea if I should read or not read that section. My brain always has to read the whole book so this only broke up the flow of that scene for me. The rest of them didn't seem to add value to the book. Usually you can tell where the characters are or what's going on by their interactions with each other or through their thoughts, so these bold sentences almost made it seem as though the author was trying to dumb down the book to make sure you didn't get confused.

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Post by Ferdinand_otieno » 16 Jun 2019, 21:28

Nisha Ward wrote:
16 Jun 2019, 18:48
Ferdinand_otieno wrote:
15 Jun 2019, 11:06
Ferdinand_otieno wrote:
13 Jun 2019, 19:52


?..but to have in every single chapter?
To never be able to go well into a chapter without knowing the key events held within?
Unacceptable!
Yeah. It was way too much giving away of the plot to actually be anything but annoying by the third chapter and it always broke the novel's flow too much.
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Post by Ferdinand_otieno » 18 Jun 2019, 00:54

Ferdinand_otieno wrote:
13 Jun 2019, 19:52
Helene_2008 wrote:
12 Jun 2019, 20:13
I'll admit it was definitely a different approach but I appreciated with the R rated scene so you were prepared for what was coming. I don't think it took away from the book and most did not allude to what was going to happen.
?..but to have in every single chapter?
It was like a big heading saying "Dumbledore will die in this chapter"....who would want to read through such a book.

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Post by sonya01 » 21 Jun 2019, 01:45

The emboldened subtitles would certainly make the reader feel like they were reading a play script instead of a novel, and I think being jerked back to reality with these qualifiers prevents complete immersion in the story. I didn’t find them necessary and a good editor would have probably advised against them.

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Post by lisalynn » 21 Jun 2019, 07:03

These types of "warnings" within the book are unnecessary and interrupt the flow of the story.

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Post by Ferdinand_otieno » 21 Jun 2019, 07:35

lisalynn wrote:
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These types of "warnings" within the book are unnecessary and interrupt the flow of the story.
I felt the same, like I was in a classroom being lectured on how to read the chapters.

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Post by Ferdinand_otieno » 22 Jun 2019, 04:18

Nisha Ward wrote:
16 Jun 2019, 18:48
Ferdinand_otieno wrote:
15 Jun 2019, 11:06
Ferdinand_otieno wrote:
13 Jun 2019, 19:52


?..but to have in every single chapter?
To never be able to go well into a chapter without knowing the key events held within?
Unacceptable!
Yeah. It was way too much giving away of the plot to actually be anything but annoying by the third chapter and it always broke the novel's flow too much.
It effectively removed from the book and made me question the need for them.

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Post by Sinclairess » 22 Jun 2019, 12:33

Ferdinand_otieno wrote:
01 Jun 2019, 08:54
From the beginning of the book, I encountered sentenses written in bold that seem to foretell too much of what was to happen. For me it felt a little bit overused since it would give away too much of the actions in the chapter.
What was your opinion on their use?
If you felt they were overused, then which chapter or scene did it for you?
(Mine was in the beginning of the book during a sexual scene between Cynthia and Sky... written as (This section is rated R) )
I giggled when I saw it. I agree that it was offputting but at least the author attempted to WARN the reader. And with the way Cynthia and Sky were flirting it was obvious they were going to do it at some point... But I believe this is the first time I've seen such an emboldened subtitle. I usually only see scene warnings in fanfiction or unplublished works.
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Post by Nisha Ward » 22 Jun 2019, 13:44

Sinclairess wrote:
22 Jun 2019, 12:33
Ferdinand_otieno wrote:
01 Jun 2019, 08:54
From the beginning of the book, I encountered sentenses written in bold that seem to foretell too much of what was to happen. For me it felt a little bit overused since it would give away too much of the actions in the chapter.
What was your opinion on their use?
If you felt they were overused, then which chapter or scene did it for you?
(Mine was in the beginning of the book during a sexual scene between Cynthia and Sky... written as (This section is rated R) )
I giggled when I saw it. I agree that it was offputting but at least the author attempted to WARN the reader. And with the way Cynthia and Sky were flirting it was obvious they were going to do it at some point... But I believe this is the first time I've seen such an emboldened subtitle. I usually only see scene warnings in fanfiction or unplublished works.
You raise an excellent point and now I can't stop seeing it like that.
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Post by Ferdinand_otieno » 22 Jun 2019, 16:31

Sinclairess wrote:
22 Jun 2019, 12:33
Ferdinand_otieno wrote:
01 Jun 2019, 08:54
From the beginning of the book, I encountered sentenses written in bold that seem to foretell too much of what was to happen. For me it felt a little bit overused since it would give away too much of the actions in the chapter.
What was your opinion on their use?
If you felt they were overused, then which chapter or scene did it for you?
(Mine was in the beginning of the book during a sexual scene between Cynthia and Sky... written as (This section is rated R) )
I giggled when I saw it. I agree that it was offputting but at least the author attempted to WARN the reader. And with the way Cynthia and Sky were flirting it was obvious they were going to do it at some point... But I believe this is the first time I've seen such an emboldened subtitle. I usually only see scene warnings in fanfiction or unplublished works.
You giggled when you saw it? Weren't you put off by the school-like insinuation of spoiling the chapter for every reader?

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