What do you think The Face of Fear could of done better?

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What do you think The Face of Fear could of done better?

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The book overall was great but every book has those few things where you just wish they could of done something different or added something to make it better, what do you think?
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I think a thorough round of editing and restructuring could do the book a great deal of good. The author should put spaces between different scenes and avoid changing perspectives haphazardly. He should also be more economical with his words and give fewer details about the setting. Overall, I felt the book moved at a rate that's a tad too slow for a mystery novel.
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I think the information that is irrelevant to the plot, should be removed.Tidbits of information are nice, but paragraphs/pages long descriptions of places/persons can take toll on the reader and distract from the plot.
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The book is not so bad, it's needs a little editing in terms of description and changing of perspective.
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I think the author could have included some sort of paragraph spaces or line breaks between the murderers conversations and the detectives conversations. At times, the change was very abrupt and almost confusing. They also could have included more information on Debbie's personality before she was kidnapped in the beginning of the book to generate more sympathy and concern over her sudden disappearance.
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Every book will always some little areas that we feel they need to be improved depending on one's taste. For this one, I think another round of editing will do it some good.
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Alicia09 wrote: 30 Dec 2018, 00:35 I think the author could have included some sort of paragraph spaces or line breaks between the murderers conversations and the detectives conversations. At times, the change was very abrupt and almost confusing. They also could have included more information on Debbie's personality before she was kidnapped in the beginning of the book to generate more sympathy and concern over her sudden disappearance.
This is one of the areas I normally hate in a book when the transitions are so abrupt and unexpected such that you have to struggle to check who is doing what. This is a good correction too.
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I completely agree with the opinions that a couple rounds of editing and better breaks would make easier reading. I needed to re-read sections to understand which character was being referenced.
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The book was not bad at all... the writer also brilliant with a good 100% reasoning
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Maybe they should change the book cover.
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I will recommend changing the book cover.
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Besides some editing, I think there should be a demarcation like a line break break between diferent scenes. The abrupt change of plot is distracting, to say the least.
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Editing is a crucial part as errors can tend to be very distracting for readers. Also, descriptions should be made just enough, to help the reader understand and remember not mentally drain them.
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Post by Kristin Ransome »

Like many other people here, I would recommend another round of editing because each error pulls the reader out of the story when they encounter it! I also think the flow of the writing could be improved, to make it clear to the reader exactly what it occurring!
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daydreaming reader wrote: 26 Dec 2018, 20:11 I think the information that is irrelevant to the plot, should be removed.Tidbits of information are nice, but paragraphs/pages long descriptions of places/persons can take toll on the reader and distract from the plot.
I agree that the book was a bit too long. But I found that if you paid attention to the small details, there were clues as to who was the GhostFace killer.
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