What do you think The Face of Fear could of done better?

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What do you think The Face of Fear could of done better?

Post by Valerie2005 » 20 Dec 2018, 11:50

The book overall was great but every book has those few things where you just wish they could of done something different or added something to make it better, what do you think?

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Post by Ever_Reading » 26 Dec 2018, 02:19

I think a thorough round of editing and restructuring could do the book a great deal of good. The author should put spaces between different scenes and avoid changing perspectives haphazardly. He should also be more economical with his words and give fewer details about the setting. Overall, I felt the book moved at a rate that's a tad too slow for a mystery novel.
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Post by daydreaming reader » 26 Dec 2018, 20:11

I think the information that is irrelevant to the plot, should be removed.Tidbits of information are nice, but paragraphs/pages long descriptions of places/persons can take toll on the reader and distract from the plot.
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Post by Jacy1986 » 26 Dec 2018, 22:25

The book is not so bad, it's needs a little editing in terms of description and changing of perspective.

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Post by Alicia09 » 30 Dec 2018, 00:35

I think the author could have included some sort of paragraph spaces or line breaks between the murderers conversations and the detectives conversations. At times, the change was very abrupt and almost confusing. They also could have included more information on Debbie's personality before she was kidnapped in the beginning of the book to generate more sympathy and concern over her sudden disappearance.
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Post by Kibetious » 30 Dec 2018, 09:06

Every book will always some little areas that we feel they need to be improved depending on one's taste. For this one, I think another round of editing will do it some good.
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Post by Kibetious » 30 Dec 2018, 09:07

Alicia09 wrote:
30 Dec 2018, 00:35
I think the author could have included some sort of paragraph spaces or line breaks between the murderers conversations and the detectives conversations. At times, the change was very abrupt and almost confusing. They also could have included more information on Debbie's personality before she was kidnapped in the beginning of the book to generate more sympathy and concern over her sudden disappearance.
This is one of the areas I normally hate in a book when the transitions are so abrupt and unexpected such that you have to struggle to check who is doing what. This is a good correction too.
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Post by K Geisinger » 31 Dec 2018, 19:02

I completely agree with the opinions that a couple rounds of editing and better breaks would make easier reading. I needed to re-read sections to understand which character was being referenced.
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Post by israelabiodun11 » 31 Dec 2018, 21:29

The book was not bad at all... the writer also brilliant with a good 100% reasoning

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Post by praisecrown8 » 02 Jan 2019, 19:34

Maybe they should change the book cover.

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Post by rogerthat » 16 Jan 2019, 03:17

I will recommend changing the book cover.

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Post by Al Chakauya » Yesterday, 12:54

Besides some editing, I think there should be a demarcation like a line break break between diferent scenes. The abrupt change of plot is distracting, to say the least.

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