Review by Lmahle -- The Diary Of An Immortal (1945-1959)

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Review by Lmahle -- The Diary Of An Immortal (1945-1959)

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[Following is a volunteer review of "The Diary Of An Immortal (1945-1959)" by David J Castello.]
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2 out of 4 stars
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The Diary of an Immortal (1945-1959) by David J. Castello follows Steven, an American soldier from World War II who stumbles upon immortality pills while liberating a concentration camp. Before he realizes it, Steven has been swept up in a controversy that is thousands of years old. Dealing with surprising side effects and teamed up with an eclectic mix of misfits, he must figure out how to stop a group of corrupt immortals before it’s too late.

The author keeps this storyline moving quickly. At times, this is because of the constant and surprising twists and turns. At other times, it feels like the storyline is moving quickly because the author did not give the events he is describing the proper time they deserve. The story is definitely in need of a strong editor. There are an overwhelming number of grammar, punctuation, and spelling errors littered throughout. While these errors are not distracting enough to ruin the experience of reading this book, they are, in fact, distracting.

The Diary of an Immortal (1945-1959) was disappointing in that it had so much potential but failed to fully live up to it. While it was a reasonably enjoyable read, the storyline and characters had so much unexplored potential in a way that almost felt lazy. The author had a very wide cast of characters, but none of them experienced any real character development. With a plotline covering so many events and a cast of so many potentially interesting characters, this book could have been 1500 pages and still been too short.

Despite the issues with punctuation and the lack of any character development, The Diary of an Immortal (1945-1959) offers the reader an opportunity to travel across the world through swing clubs in New York all the way to a monastery in China. I can truly say this about the book – the reader will never anticipate what is going to happen next. This book was a roller coaster of twists and turns, shocking moves, and surprise endings.

Therefore, I am giving The Diary of an Immortal (1945-1959) by David J. Castello a rating of 2 out of 4 stars. The story itself has a lot of potential, and the twists and turns keep the reader interested even when the characters are a bit dull. With a strong editor to clean up the myriad of errors, this book has the potential to be rated much higher. I would recommend this book for readers who enjoy historical fiction, especially centered around the 1940s and 1950s.

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