Review by Oulababe -- Invisible Me by H M Irwing

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Review by Oulababe -- Invisible Me by H M Irwing

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[Following is a volunteer review of "Invisible Me" by H M Irwing.]
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2 out of 4 stars
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If you wanted to lose weight when you were a teenager, and you found a magic shake that could do that immediately, you’d take it, right? Maybe you’d take it in such a hurry you wouldn’t notice if you added an ingredient that wasn’t supposed to be there. I don’t blame Freddie from Invisible Me by H.M. Irwing for that night when she added her father’s research concoctions to her weight loss shake. To her surprise, Freddie lost weight but gained something else, invisibility.

When Freddie becomes invisible, she stays a whole year without seeing her best friend, Kyle. The only person she talks to is her father. On her eighteenth birthday, she goes to visit Kyle. However, she finds Edwin. Edwin is Kyle’s cousin and her crush. She wanted to lose weight to impress Edwin. Edwin notices her when she starts bleeding from a wound that she gets running away. She ends up telling Edwin the truth first. Later she tells Kyle the truth. Edwin offers Freddie a job in his company. Things between them get steamy when Edwin starts to make moves on Freddie. They end up falling in love. Freddie is so fearless and loving that she commits corporate espionage for Edwin. You’ll want to read about how she does it.

I have to say that I was disappointed that Edwin was Freddie’s love interest. I think Kyle was more suited for the role. Edwin did not even know Freddie before she bumped into him yet they have such a serious and committed relationship in a concise time. For a book that’s 133 pages long, their relationship was unrealistic. I understand that relationships can start as fast as Edwin’s and Freddie’s, but it’s unrealistic for it to lead to marriage in such a short period. Freddie had more chemistry with Kyle than she had with Edwin which made the whole story feel unrealistic. Some of the reactions in this story also didn’t sound realistic. For example, if you found out that apparently, your best friend has been invisible the past one year, wouldn’t you be a little freaked out? I think the way Kyle and Edwin react to the news that Freddie is invisible is unrealistic. If they lived in a world where such things are common, I would have understood their reaction. However, Freddie is the only invisible person in the book which leaves me with questions about Kyle’s and Edwin’s calm reactions.

I found some typos in the book. They were annoying and disrupted my flow of reading. Some examples are "then" instead of "than" and "starting" instead of "staring" among others. There are also missing commas. I appreciate that the book is a fast read.

I rate this book 2 out of 4 stars. It has an exciting storyline, but the errors and unrealistic ideas make it less enjoyable. I recommend professional editing for this book. I recommend this book to romance lovers. It has mature content which is why I wouldn’t recommend it to readers who are aged under 18 years.

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Thanks for your honest review. I totally understand your frustration The book should be properly edited before it can get a higher rating.

Lovely review!
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Thanks for your review! It's too bad that you didn't like the book; it seems to have a good premise. For the reasons you listed though, like the unrealistic relationships and poor editing, I probably won't read it.
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Great points. I think Kyle would have been a better match for her. I think their relationship was pretty quick. Given how she was invisible most of the time. Thanks for the review!
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I really like how you start your review with the milk shake question! I like the story concept - it's a shame that the book does not do it justice.
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Post by Connie Otwani »

Your review is very interesting. Looks like there was no closure between Freddie and Kyle. I also wonder how Kyle explained her one year absence before learning she was invisible. These would help with 'realisticating' the book. Great review though!
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Wow a very interesting review. I have read some of H M Irwing books and I must admit that her work is great. I'm looking forward to reading this book. Thanks for your review
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One sad thing about life is when we are forced to make a "trade-off." What if don't have to and that we'll just get what we'd like to have without negatively affecting ourselves or others at all? That would be a dream, but it'll be difficult to say that such could perfectly happen in reality.

I could also see where "you're coming from." Thank you for your honest review, though.
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I've read a sample of this book and I agree with your honest review! Great stuff!
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Referring to your question, no I won't get that milk shake because I am naturally thin since I was little up until now, an adult. I have read the other writings by this author and I enjoyed them very much. Thank you for your honest review.
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To be very blunt, unrealistic ideas and typing errors are two things I have repeatedly found in this author's writing. Add to that a cluttered way of writing, I am staying clear of her books. Thanks for the honest review!
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I fell in love with the sample and purchased the book. I think I'm too taken by the premise to worry about the errors, although they'd been quite evident from the start. However, I haven't gotten to the completely unrealistic parts that you've mentioned, but I sure would provide feedback on them when I do! Thanks for your honest review.
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I have to say that I was disappointed that Edwin was Freddie’s love interest. I think Kyle was more suited for the role. Edwin did not even know Freddie before she bumped into him yet they have such a serious and committed relationship in a concise time. For a book that’s 133 pages long, their relationship was unrealistic. I understand that relationships can start as fast as Edwin’s and Freddie’s, but it’s unrealistic for it to lead to marriage in such a short period. Freddie had more chemistry with Kyle than she had with Edwin which made the whole story feel unrealistic. Some of the reactions in this story also didn’t sound realistic. For example, if you found out that apparently, your best friend has been invisible the past one year, wouldn’t you be a little freaked out? I think the way Kyle and Edwin react to the news that Freddie is invisible is unrealistic. If they lived in a world where such things are common, I would have understood their reaction. However, Freddie is the only invisible person in the book which leaves me with questions about Kyle’s and Edwin’s calm reactions.
I have to say this surprises me. The other books I've read by H.M. Irwing are quite realistic romances: flawed, complicated, human. This one seems like it approaches a delicate subject, the struggle of being overweight but in not such a realistic way. I wonder why.
Thank you for a very honest review.
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I think that the idea of the book of Freddie being invisible was a good one. It seemed to be kind of unexciting until she tried to spy for Edwin's company, however, that was a short part of the book. In all, the book had potential and had some good parts to the story.
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I found the book to be quite exciting. The errors are a pity.

Thank you for the great review.
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