2 out of 4 stars
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Sonya is on the run from the Screamon Demons biker gang. While at first living with them was edgy and full of excitement, they've started murdering innocent people. But the gang won't let her go without a fight. They are willing to kill any and all who help Sonya in her escape. As she continues to evade the gang, she promises God to make amends for her ways the same night she runs into Trey.
Trey has invented a cloaking device that will make him rich. But in the hands of the wrong person, it could kill millions. Plagued by nightmares, Trey decides to destroy it. This causes his life to head in a downward spiral. Losing both his fiancé and his job, Trey ends up at Almighty IT where a misguided coworker unknowingly sets him on the path to the terrorist squad Chrome Falcon. Hunted down by the terrorist squad, they want Trey to implement his cloaking device to upgrade their equipment. Together with Sonya, he will try to escape the terrorists and put an end to their schemes.
Bullets fly and motorcycles rev their engines as the action starts in chapter one with Sonya on the run from the Screamon Demons. But while the first chapter is exciting and hooks the reader into the story, there is a sudden time jump once both main characters are introduced. Without a prologue to explain the time jump it is hard to grasp what is happening when characters are suddenly in different places and times.
That being said, Ben Schneider knows how to write action scenes. Any time there was a chase or some sort of conflict the necessary details were there. The scenes would draw you in and not let go, keeping you on the edge of your seat. The characters would pull off impressive feats that made you eager for more.
However, even with well-written scenes, there was too much filler taking away from the rest of the story. There were sections dedicated to minor characters who only stayed around for a paragraph or two and song lyrics that did not even associate with actions occurring in the book. There was also a span of time where the characters actually did nothing other than vacation while the terrorist group searched for them. If the filler had been cut down and the action sequences lined up, then the book would have been more entertaining.
The character's inner thoughts could have also benefited from a bit of editing. No matter the character, they gave away more information than they needed to. A lot of the inner thoughts could have been cut down and shown through actions to make them more interesting and beneficial to the story.
Despite its shortcomings, the action scenes were well written and the base storyline was enjoyable. There were no grammatical errors that I could find, but there were formatting errors. A few times towards the end of the novel, the font turned into blue underlined text. This was very distracting and it was hard to read. Throughout the whole novel, there would also be gaps on pages where the paragraphs had too many spaces in between them. Unfortunately, due to these errors, I have to give Chrome Mountain 2 out of 4 stars.
I would recommend this book to people who enjoy action-filled science fiction novels. Of course, fans of motorcycles would probably enjoy Sonya's Harley Davidson as well.
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