Short Story Contest 1 - "Billy's Coloring Book"

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Re: Short Story Contest 1 - "Billy's Coloring Book"

Post by Williamz » 02 Apr 2013, 02:33

Billy and Monster love all the holidays as they get to spend quality time together. However, their best holiday is Easter as they get to eat their favorite food...CHOCOLATE!
This is a nicely illustrated story which gives a lesson in an entertaining way. Billy and his Monster go to Grandma's for Easter and eat too many chocolate eggs. Billy learns that he needs to eat in moderation.

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Post by mydualbrella » 17 Jul 2013, 11:46

The story was written wonderfully but I can't seem to understand the last part. Anyway, the writer seems to write this story very creatively.

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Post by Carla Hurst-Chandler » 17 Jul 2013, 15:12

Billy is an adult prisoner on death row.
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Post by leseluv » 02 Jan 2014, 19:53

It was quite interesting. Not completely sure what happened at the end, but i liked it.

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Post by neha+thomas+ » 13 Feb 2014, 20:59

I think the author has left the last part to the imagination of the reader, you can make what you want of it. Initially I thought , Billy is a little boy but after reading through completely I think Billy is a man who is in prison and serving a term. But all in all it is a good read.

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Post by Dana0483 » 26 Feb 2014, 19:24

Nice short story with an unseen twist.

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Post by Nielgraph » 16 Apr 2014, 22:03

Very creative. Nice story. Thank you.

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Post by Sweet_Lullaby » 24 Nov 2014, 14:46

that was so cool! Very well written, but I had a little trouble with the end as well.

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Post by jolovesbooks1 » 02 Dec 2014, 11:04

Very unexpected ending. I like that in a story.

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Post by LivreAmour217 » 03 Dec 2014, 20:50

Wow! Amazing story with a surprising twist! Billy morphed from innocent little boy to orange-jumpsuited death row inmate in the blink of an eye! I sure didn't see that coming :shock: However, I wonder if Billy really understands what he did to land himself in prison, and it makes me a little sad, because I can't help imagining that Billy is mentally handicapped.
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Post by ejcogan » 31 Jan 2015, 21:11

I liked it! Sounds like Billy was going to his execution and was trying to remember his last beautiful moment...
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Post by Nishan Dass » 13 Oct 2015, 02:42

Good story

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Post by TangledinText » 11 Nov 2015, 12:56

It left me with a scrunched up, confused facial expression. I predicted some type of twist trying to relate in coloring as a kid and not once remembering ever mixing colors and knowing off the top of my head what colors made up brown or peach. Maybe it is because I was just spoiled with a 64 crayola pack that I didn't have to make my mind work like that. Intense story. It seems the author definitely service their purpose in providing a cliff hanger, but this seems to leave you hanging with no sense of direction in which to fall, float, fly. It was too open-ended, but then again I could just be frustrated because I don't get it.

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Post by zaynab_m » 16 Nov 2015, 10:53

Wow, amazing story! I read the entire story through; I loved it! And I also have a sneaky feeling I do understand what you're saying... though I might be wrong.

The story is written beautifully, with great descriptions. I love it!
I have loved the stars too fondly to be fearful of the night.

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Post by secarsuwor » 08 Dec 2015, 02:56

Wow, so cool story .
I could feel the expression in this story

-- 08 Dec 2015, 02:57 --

Oh i forget to say thanks for this story

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