Short Story Contest 3 Winner - "The Blue Girl" by Shaphat

The deadline for the second contest has already passed and the stories are available for reading. It had a Spring theme, and the winner got a $25 gift certificate. Stay tuned for information regarding another contest!
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1 star - poor, bad
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2 stars - fair, okay
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36%
3 stars - good, recommend it
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33%
4 stars - amazing, excellent
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18%
 
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Re: Short Story Contest 3 Winner - "The Blue Girl" by Shapha

Post by bascomjean » 04 Mar 2014, 21:25

A very intense story! The writing could use a bit of a brush up, but the content is compelling.

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Post by olympia23 » 11 Mar 2014, 08:17

very good story. wow!!

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Post by TimothyNoble7 » 19 Mar 2014, 02:10

That was good. Well paced. Someone said it best when they said it looked like a lot of work was put into it.

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Post by tmoore1990 » 24 Mar 2014, 19:58

Well written. Why did everybody have to die though? That's some Stephen King type stuff.

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Post by jamespoet » 29 Mar 2014, 09:44

I was wondering when the new contest will come out.
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Post by missanonymous » 05 Apr 2014, 16:22

Amazing job! I really enjoyed this!

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Post by lucindaheartsbooks » 13 Apr 2014, 16:49

Really really good story! Loved it!

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Post by RILENTLISS » 14 Apr 2014, 14:01

A well condensed plot. Unfortunate, but then again, power should never be placed in the hands of a child.

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Post by DickDatchery » 11 Jul 2014, 12:33

Any plans to run another contest sometime? I'd love to participate.

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Post by cbmatte07 » 24 Jul 2014, 12:39

A decent short story. You can feel the effort put into this story is genuine. Aside from a few grammatical issues, if it were properly revised it has a lot of potential. There was a feeling of suspense throughout the story that made me curious to see how it ended. Once I read the ending, I realized I was not entirely expecting the outcome. It was morbid which makes it appealing most especially to the readers who enjoy the Horror/Thriller genre.

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Post by Johntherobert » 03 Aug 2014, 13:02

I liked this story. That would be neat if Betsy could be that shadow on the wall.

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Post by Kzin » 06 Aug 2014, 16:50

That was pretty entertaining.

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Post by CloudedRune » 12 Aug 2014, 06:16

I agree about it needing to be proofread for a few grammatical errors, and I wasn't entirely sure what to make of it at first, but I do think it is an interesting story and I found the ending quite compelling!

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Post by animalgirl » 16 Aug 2014, 13:56

I really liked this story. There wasn't a boring part in it. I can see why it won. I loved the plot and the ending surprised me. I wasn't expecting it. But this story needs to be edited for typos, grammar and punctuation.

Overall, the plot and storyline doesn't need any work IHO. Nice work.

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Post by Sauroke » 10 Sep 2014, 14:38

Awesome! It reminded me of the Poe Award short stories I have read in the past. I am glad I didn't read it late at night!

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